Subject: To me...
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Posted on: 2016-03-13 18:24:00 UTC

Yeah, it reads as though McGonagall speaks while she is in the act of transforming back, which doesn't make much sense. I think J.K.R. probably should have written the passage something like this:

Professor McGonagall turned back into herself with a faint pop. "Really, what has got into you all today?" she said, staring around at them all. "Not that it matters, but that's the first time my transformation's not got applause from a class."

That puts events in the order they happen (which is very important for precisely the reasons shown in this example) and doesn't have her doing things at the same time that she shouldn't.

See also: Ing Disease.

~Neshomeh

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