Subject: That's actually pretty good.
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Posted on: 2014-01-08 09:29:00 UTC

No, scratch that - very good. I liked Legolas' misshapen horse idea. ;)

Two things I would raise, were you to continue this: firstly, in his list of names for himself, Gandalf lists 'Incánus' as his name 'in the South'. Tolkien wavered over what this meant - it was either a name he used in Gondor, or derived from Haradrim 'Inkā-nūsh'/'Inkā-nūs', North-spy. I think, for the purposes of fic-writing, you could call him the Grey Wizard Inkā-nūsh.

Secondly, while I like the account of Saruman's betrayal, Amro's naming of Lorien jars a bit. How has he heard of it? He wasn't directed there by Morinehtar, or by Saruman. I would suggest having him name it as 'Dwimordene', and saying (or leaving unsaid) that he picked up the name from the Rohirrim - who say that a witch lives there. The connection 'magic user might help me find other magic user' could occur to him all by himself.

hS

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