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First hS and Kaitlyn, now kgarret and Sara! We're the insane version of Match.com!
*laughs and hugs*
*gives out chocolate cupcakes*
Congrats, you two!

I'm pretty sure the hunter guns are fuel rod cannon - heavy radiation and plasma burst weaponry, rather than goo.

In chapter 5 (looks like you co-wrote it with someone), it says "six tanks, and a few warthogs flew over the hill on the other side of the hill." First off, I'm pretty sure Scorpions don't fly - it's more of a lumbering crawl, or at least was in the original. Also, referencing multiple hills gets confusing very quickly - could something be added to identify them?

Per the bits of canon that I've read (Fall of Reach, mostly), I didn't think that Spartan toughness was generally known, so saying "The heavily armed troop transports were fast and maneuverable, and their plasma turrets were capable of killing even SPARTANs in a few shots" doesn't seem reasonable, unless the character making the observation has prior experience in the area.

Technical nit-picking aside, it's very well written. The characters are believable, and I'm definitely enjoying the descriptions of the navy action. The story is very much in the flavor of the Halo universe.

The story seems very unemotional at times, to the point of being almost clinical in its descriptions. It seems to spend more time discussing calibers and target areas than what the people involved are actually feeling.

Okay, one more technical nit-pick... The story mentions the Benelux (odd name - doesn't seem in-character for the universe) moving from low orbit to a geostationary orbit above Eva - that would suggest to me that Eva is equatorial, as otherwise, the Benelux would have to stand on her thrusters.

Geostationary orbit is also very, very high altitude - here on Earth, it's more than twice the equatorial circumference of the planet. Getting that high would make providing accurate orbital fire support difficult from the Benelux a bit difficult. While she could stand on her thrusters at a lower altitude, that quickly becomes a major power drain.

...what with me being all bitter and single and all. *needs a boyfriend*

Seriously, though, that's awesome for you two. Congratulations! Here's hoping all goes well and that you're very happy together. *proffers chocolates and fizzy cider*

~ Rath ~

How cute! Mini rancor. Still, I'm trying to show mercy.

Long answer: the inability to capitalise, the blatant Sue, the lack of punctuation, the constant bold text and the severe OOCness provide more than enough charges just in the bit of the first chapter I read.

Ooh, a mini. How hard is it to spell Chewie, seriously?

*gives a box of chocolates shaped like hearts*

Yes, that's the problem with really esoteric fandoms that are only known to people of a philological or medieval bent. There's not a great deal of fantards about. Still, the Beeb's version of Merlin's probably produced some truly awful tripe. Unfortunately I, um, forgot to get into it (I miss my Robin Hood; I will not be swayed to a different anachronistic offering from Auntie Beeb) and so can't really go hunting badfic with any degree of competence.

Ah, so the hsavinien who keeps commenting on our missions and random entries in Trojie's lj is you? I shall try to remember that.

Well you already know I think it's good, but what the hell, I'll say it again: Nice work, an enjoyable read as before.

Great stuff guys, glad to see people getting together, especially you KG. Anyhow, hope you have a great time together.

http://www.fanfiction.net/s/4662735/1/TheScarletttales

If it's been marked AU, do we let them off the hook?

All the best, guys. ^_^

~Neshomeh, who has been trying to drag her boyfriend onto the Board.

Yeah, but I was thinking about a more...canon disposal method. Sues would probably act like the crystal from First Strike: they'd screw the Slipspace up badly enough to distort canon events. Besides, if you don't see the body...

Have a K-9, mark IV!

Death by Keyship sounds fun, and the pre-glassing speech sounds like it would make a great addition. For the twins, maybe they could be knocked out and thrown to the Keelbugs? (Cut content; a Covenant race that floats around cutting corpses into pieces and taking them away for disposal) That, or the Covenant Stalkers (Also cut content; they sneak up to enemies and shred them, and look a bit like Zerglings. The idea behind them was moved to the much weaker and less aggressive Pure Flood Stalker Form.)

I was considering tying them to Regret's ship during the New Mombasa Slipspace jump, but there is a high chance of them disappearing through a plothole - Slipspace can make people inexplicably disappear.

Congratulations.

The following fic was written by myself and several other members of a Star Wars story writing group called the Vast Empire. If you would give me your opinions/places to improve I would be very grateful.

http://www.fanfiction.net/s/4556817/1/Paradise_Burning

It's incomplete, and I wrote the bits marked as "by Dante". Thoughts?

*Showers with Bleepolate Hearts* Congrats guys! And I think there is a trend emerging somewhere on this Board...

Good idea. Adding to the irony, I plan to recruit the bit Elite who rescues Kyle, as well as the rest of his crew. Their CCS cruiser could do the job. Hmm...wonder if I can pull off a "your sues shall burn until they are naught but glass" speech...

Juggernaught seems good, although it's a bit quick for that..heresy.

As for the High Charity, they'd probably survive due to a combination of gel layers, Elite resistance to fall damage, and Suevian ability. Now, if we were to attach them to the Forerunner Key Ship's engines...

*Gives lots of celebratory Peppermint Bark and other nummy forms of chocolate. Carved as cute snowmen. With hearts.*

Glad we all could play a small, tangential role in your happiness.

*showers you with chocolate* Congratulations! ^_^

Good luck! *toasts*

*offers celebratory drinks*

May you live long and prosper, and all that stuff.

Aranox doesn't seem to be an actual Haloverse planet. I'd suggest glassing it while yelling out the charge list into a giant speaker.

Oh, and http://www.fanfiction.net/s/4673294/1/TwinSpartans

The UnCanon, it burns... 14-year-old twins who become Spartans. The worst part? They're apparently born with the qualities of the Spartans. Yes, that's right. They have the exact same augmentations through natural means. Blatant Stuism, and absolutely horrible biology. Do me a favor and poke around until you find the coordinates for the Cut Content, then feed 'em to the Flood Juggernaut.

Another one: <a href="http://www.fanfiction.net/s/4444991/1/DreamCatcher">http://www.fanfiction.net/s/4444991/1/Dream_Catcher

Horrible grammar. The Elite in the first chapter (which was uploaded twice, by the way) says “c'mon dun be like dat". Yes, that was a copypasted quote. Extra Spartan Mary-Sue, as there was no Maya-101 in canon. The author names the Arbiter Lazaro. Stupid, because she made an effort to make her own profile name sound like valid Sangheili. Oh, and he's completely OOC. You could drop her off the tallest point in High Charity, that would be fun...