Subject: Chapter 2 review.
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Posted on: 2018-06-19 12:24:00 UTC

This chapter starts out light and easy - too easy. The fact that Sergio and Nikki are able to get exactly what they're looking for sets off all sorts of alarm bells (and it's good to see that the agents are genre-savvy enough to pick up on that!).

And then... action sequence! I think this was really well-written, and I say that as someone who has great difficulty writing action. :) It serves to increase the dissonance between the idea that the Factories are behind this, and the actual events we're seeing. I'm glad I saved this all to read at once, because I'd hate to get caught in cliffhangers down the line.

You also continue to build the background suspense over what the heck is up with Sergio's history. I'm really looking forward to getting that one answered. :)

Favourite line: “… We are being shipped by canons?"

hS

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