Subject: So I started reading this quite a while ago...
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Posted on: 2020-12-05 18:48:03 UTC
I mean, it's got dragons in it. Of course I was going to read it! At my current rate, though, I have no idea when I might get around to finishing it, so I decided to at least share the notes I took so far:
"Animorphagus," huh? I read that as Animorph-phagus, eater of Animorphs. Oh dear. {; P
Yee, dragons! This should be fun. Charlie's definitely having fun. Excellent.
The RA is disguised? Like a DORKS? I don't think I've ever seen that before, and yet it makes sense. Nice.
This fic is a formatting nightmare. I have little to no clue who these dragons are, who is doing or saying what, or why I should care.
> Sunrise ... felt no true remorse, only shock in her talons.
- Ouch. Did Nightshade have electricity-based powers or something? {= P
> He slipped out of his nest and took flight as his eyes closed in concentration.
Flying with your eyes closed? That's not very smart. How many times is he going to crash into things? {= D
Nice work pointing out the sudden shift in characterization when Sunrise suddenly goes all timid.
... And that is all. I WILL try to get back to it at some point, but for now, my impression is that you've got a nice pair of characters, but could get more humor out of the fic if you read the lines a bit more closely and really think about what they're saying.
More eventually, I hope!
~Neshomeh