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Not really much else to say. It was short and good, and a nice light read.

I can't imagine waking up with a tattoo on your face is a pleasant experience, though. Time to break out the lasers! ...Unless it's Suvian ink and he can't get rid of it, which seems more likely. I can't help but wonder if it's going to have a bigger significance later on, though.

Interlude Title: A Changed Man
Canon: PPC

Rating: T, for swears

Agents: Trevelyan, A.

Time Period: May 2010 HST

Word Count: 1012
Summary: Three years away from HQ on one hell of a mission can turn a man into something different. Even if he doesn’t notice.

Turn and face the strange..

(We get a little bit about the revised Team Phoenix in this one...call it a teaser.)

The shimmering blue likeness of the baron folded its arms and sighed. "I thought it would have been obvious I was in favor of—oh, fine. Consider this the tiebreaker vote. I'm in favor of letting Wechi and the Riding have a say in the Council."

I'd like to write that, please.

Well, it's actually more complicated. The original Star Wars Official Fanfiction Academy was written by Alistair Fyrethorne and Leto Haven, but has been deleted. Leto, an oldbie and ancient of days, is no longer active, as far as I know. Thus, the original Star Wars OFU is dead, and will probably never come back to life.

Furthermore, new canon has been released, with more to come. Star Wars already has the most fics in the Movies section of the Pit, and that number will only grow. Kylo Ren redemption fics are running rampant. Poe Dameron romances will continue to spread. When will it end, PPC? When will it end? At the doors of the Star Wars Fanfiction Academy, that's where.

I jest, I jest. Really, I'd like to write this OFU because it would be lots of fun. I love Star Wars, and there is a heck of a lot of fic for it. The fact that it was already technically written, however, gives me pause.

That's my question. Does anyone have any issue with my taking over the Star Wars OFU, considering the fact that the original is gone for good and its authors are no longer active?

-Alleb

Since Plort dropped off the Board, it’s time to wrap this up.

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This Council was held from the twelfth of July until the twenty-fifth of July in the City of Borrd.

Attendees:

• Baron Huinesoron
  
• Sar Iximaz (a baron of Plort) appeared briefly by magic
  
• Baron Kaitlyn was present, but did not say a word.
  
• Baron Neshomeh was still absent on a campaign against the Subjugator, but voiced her opinions through a messenger.
  
• Baron PC
  
• Protector Tomash of the Refuge of Ozerbord

Baron Eshakhar could not attend the council – apparently traveling in countries far abroad – but she sent a message accepting her barony.
Baron Phobos sent a messenger to announce that he had "more important matters to attend to" – but since there is certainly nothing more important than the Council of Plort, he may actually have been wounded and too proud to admit that he could not travel.

Non-deciding attendees:

• Knight Ælcalen, mayor of L'Urque
  
• The Djenni, messenger of Baron Neshomeh
  
• Filius Caeli, a civilian from the City of Borrd in the Protectorate of Borrd
  
• Frackles, messenger of Kwenaya, messaging nothing that needed to be discussed
  
• Sir Hardric, a wandering knight
  
• Sir Hieronymus the hermit, keeper of the records
  
• Oopart, messenger of Baron Phobos had no instructions to bring up subjects or to vote in Baron Phobos name
  
• Ye Scape-Grace, a knight from Keep De'endee and friend of the Diskord

Agenda:
A change of the rules of procedure (moved to top) – a proposal by Baron Huinesoron to let the archivists of the Commonwealth of Wechi, the Beytahs of the Riding of Sittorese, Protector Tomash of Ozerbord and the Mords of the Diskord participate in the Baronial Council as voting representatives of their respective nations.

A new nation – the Council is asked to acknowledge the establishment of a fifth nation, referred to as the Confederation of Diskord, which took possession of lands in the far east around La Wunj and in the west on the Geymez Plateau.

A new barony – per an invocation of the Edict of Bast, the newly created Baron Eshakhar receives the lands previously held by the permanently absent Baron Cassie, including the part that has last year been ceded to the now permanently absent Baron Thanasius Ampelius.

The relocation of Barony Huinesoron – a proposal by Baron Huinesoron to let him take the lands previously held by the permanently absent barons Araeph and July, but cede the territories south of the River Meibot – he may actually have meant the Meibot’s tributary Jid'ryv – back to Baron Neshomeh (west of the Auriantym Chain) respective Baron Juliette (east of the Auriantym Chain), making Neshomeh the only baron in Wechi again.

The disposition of Baron Huinesoron’s western territories – since Baron Huinesoron moves to eastern Borrd and the Riding of Sittorese, he intends to leave what is left of Ozerbord without a baron, but to cede his lands between the River Wep and the Wattuf Mountains, and the Geymez Plateau to Lady Iximaz, who, by another invocation of the Edict of Bast, would also receive the western part of former Barony Thanasius Ampelius.

The status of the City of Borrd – a move by Baron Huinesoron to exclude the capital from his new barony and let the Council of Borrd jointly take baronial authority over this city, as has been proposed on many previous occasions.

The Warden of Spelin – a move by Baron Huinesoron to appoint Ye Scape-Grace of De'endee as the warden of the Temple of Spelin.

New flags – Ye Scape-Grace used the opportunity to present the flag of the Confederation of Diskord (final version) to a greater public.
In the absence of any actual residents of the Riding of Sittorese, Hieronymus the hermit presented the flag of the Riding that, due to its difficult octarine colored part, had been in the works for two years.
Based on the national flags, Baron Huinesoron proposed a revised Union flag representing the Five Nations, the Five Eras of Rule and the Five Ages of Plort.

Decisions:
By votes of four to zero, Protector Tomash of Ozerbord and the Mords of the Diskord were invited to join the barons in the newly named Council of the Union of Plort.

Since there is a tie between two pro-votes and two contra-votes, no decision could be made concerning the representation of the Riding of Sittorese by its Beytahs.

Although three barons support the idea of having some sort of representation of the Commonwealth of Wechi that would be independent of the resident baron, and only one baron spoke against it, the barons’ actual intentions were left unclear. By not objecting to Sir Hieronymus speaking for all denizens of Wechi, Baron Neshomeh – who obviously is a denizen of Wechi – may have changed her mind from "invite the archivists" (apparently intending to give one vote to each archivist) to "let all denizens of Wechi have one collective vote". Either way, she would not be in agreement with Baron Huinesoron, who specified that "the archivists" should get one collective vote. Sar Iximaz’s "no objections to adding more voices to the council" is factually an abstain, since it might support whatever form of expanding the council the other barons decide to fit best, but there is no favored position. Thus, no actual decision could be made.

A new nation – Since the Mords of the Confederation of Diskord are now members of the Council of Plort, this nations existence has been acknowledged; no negotiation of borders was attempted.

A new barony – Since no negotiation of borders was attempted, Barony Eshakhar exists now within the borders as stipulated by the Edict of Bast.

The relocation of Barony Huinesoron – There was no opposition against Baron Huinesoron moving into eastern Borrd, but Baron Neshomeh objected to Baron Huinesoron taking possession of the parts of former Barony July east of the Larninkurv Mountains, claiming these lands for herself. After some discussion, Barons Huinesoron and Neshomeh agreed that they should both hold lands in the Riding of Sittorese, their border following the River Jid'ryv from Goch't to Flayme, and its tributary Jid'auks from there to the Larninkurvs. Barony Neshomeh now extends into the Riding, and the new Barony Huinesoron exists in eastern Borrd and in the Riding between Baronies Eshakhar and Neshomeh.

The disposition of Baron Huinesoron’s western territories – Barony Iximaz is unchanged.

In case Sar Iximaz did not want to expand her territories, Baron PC suggested to let him take baronial responsibility for the lands in western Diskord. This was supported by Baron Neshomeh, Baron Huinesoron and Sar Iximaz (actually speaking of all lands suggested to be placed under their control). Thus, Barony PC now includes western Diskord.

In case Sar Iximaz did not want to expand her territories, Baron Neshomeh further suggested to let the "northern parts" of Baron Huinesoron's former lands pass to Baron Phobos. (Since she agreed to let Protector Thomash represent the baronless nation of Ozerbord in the council, but opposed to the Beytahs of Sittorese representing the Riding that is already represented by its barons, she may not actually have attempted to expand her husband’s barony into Ozerbord, which would not get any support by other members of the Council.) Baron Neshomehs move was supported by Baron Huinsoron, specifying east of the Wattufs, and implicitly by Sar Iximaz not wanting any of those lands. Thus, Barony Phobos now extends to the Wattuf Mountains.

The status of the City of Borrd – Lacking any further discussion, the barons of the Council of Borrd obviously accepted their joint baronial authority over the City of Borrd.

The Warden of Spelin – Without objections Ye Scape-Grace is now the warden of the Temple of Spelin, but her claim to represent the will of the goddess in the Council was downright ignored.

New flags – The revised Union flag, based on the flags of the five nations, was accepted without dispute.

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This document is still open for corrections, in case the keeper of the records got something wrong. If no objections occur, copies will be sent to all libraries of Plort for easy access.

Hieronymus the hermit, part-time knight of Wechi, archivist’s apprentice and keeper of the records

Congrats, Ypsi!

For a short interlude (about 1k words). Some Doctor Who/Torchwood knowledge would be helpful for context, but isn't necessary. Does contain spoilers for the end of season 3 of Torchwood, so if you don't want those, then be warned.

I'm mainly just looking for a second pair of eyes. I wrote this back in March and just rediscovered it; it looks pretty good to me, but there could be something I'm missing. Any type of beta welcome (SPaG, flow, etc).

Thanks!
~Z

Completely ignoring Time, she strode forward and up the stairs, moving purposefully towards Spanky. When she reached him, she spoke in a cold, hard tone - "Why have you broken my party, Clown?" Her body language spoke volumes of hostility; the air around her seemed to crackle faintly.

The Hostess was not happy.

HE GOT IT

HE HAS IT

He gots the perms!

The permission!

CONGRAGULATIONS, Ypsiman!

If only I could find some way to morph your name into some context-suitable version. But I, er, can't. I tried.

CONGRAGULATIONS ANYWAY!
Be real cool to see yer stories coming up!

Well, let's have a look!

Do I know you? Yup! I've seen you on the Board for a while, and I also remember you being active in the Discord chat. You're definitely an active member of the community.

The characters: I have a few questions, but they're mainly small. They are:

-This bit in Crim's profile: "He tends to act like he thinks he is better than everyone else, though he doesn’t actually believe as much and is only doing it for humor’s sake." It's a bit of a weird thing to do, though then again, people can be weird. You've got to wonder how he started doing it and *why*. Or does this only actually show up in lines like his "Don't call me boss, young lady" line in the second prompt? If so, this suddenly makes a lot more sense to me.

-Crim's relationship to video games. From Google, I understand that he's from a video game continuum, which I assume is why he got placed in the Video Games division. How long has he been an agent? Has he been taking on missions in any canon other than his own prior to being partnered with Cynthia?

-This bit: "[Cynthia's] black hair is usually tied back in a ponytail, which she claims is a purely functional choice. Nobody believes her." I'm not entirely sure I'm catching the meaning of this properly--is it that people believe she's doing it for beauty purposes? Something else that I'm missing? Wouldn't mind some clarification here.

-I'd kind of love to see Crim bore a Sue to death sometime, mainly because it sounds like it could be fun to read. That's just a comment, though, not a critique.

Overall: the characters look good! My quibbles with them are pretty minor; the biggest one is probably how on earth Crim got to the point of acting stuck-up for humor's sake. They generally look interesting and even relatable. I'd say they're good (though I would like those explanations!) But can you write well with them?

The prompts: It seems you can! I enjoyed both prompts. Your characters feel pretty fleshed out, and don't heavily contradict their profile descriptions. They also work well as a team--they bounce off each other very well, and I could imagine them working well together and creating interesting mission reports. I liked Crim's moment of awkward compassion after hearing how Cynthia lost her last partner, and I generally just like their dynamic. I also didn't spot any writing errors: if they're there, they're so small I couldn't spot them even after several read-throughs. I do have a small quibble with Crim's opinion on Loki--it's perfectly possible to know and like both Norse mythology and Marvel's weird take on Asgard--but that's a matter of my personal opinion clashing with the character's (and maybe yours?) and not an actual issue.

Overall: I liked both of your prompts. Your writing style is fun to read. Your characters have a good dynamic, and I want to read more about them despite the fact that I'm unlikely to recognize any canon they go into.

The badfic: ...okay. These are not canons I know in the slightest, despite recognizing the Pegasus Knight title (I know someone with a character who is one. That's pretty much the sum of my knowledge). I skimmed the first and last chapters anyway, trying to get a sense of it; the most I can tell is that the protagonist does have a bit of More Competent and Awesome Than You syndrome going on. Past that, I'll trust your summary, since you actually know the canons. If you think you can get a good mission out of it, go ahead. I do notice that it's characters from Crim's home canon being upstaged, so I could see this working well.

And I believe all that leaves us with is that...this all looks good! Permission granted!

Congratulations! Go forth and write :)

~Z

"Alas! The curious cat indeed met misfortune, though how was she to know the shark was hungry?" The clown exclaimed, hamming for all it was worth. "And woe is Spanky that he cannot float! Climb walls, yes; walk within the mirrors, yes; bend reality itself to his will, yes! But floating yet eludes him!" A single tear begins to form in the eye of its mask. "Oh, if only Spanky could award brave party goers with fabulous prizes! That would make him truly happy, yes! But alas! He cannot, unless they can make it through his funhouse. But they do not, and so Spanky must consign himself to be a sad clown, with a sad piano, and a sad funhouse, and a sad funhouse is no fun at all!" As if to confirm that the funhouse itself was sad, the jaunting tune began to warp and slow until it jangled discordantly, and the brightly painted walls began to gray.

I'm glad you guys finally went after that fic! It feels like that thing has been haunting the Discord for months, now . . .

I actually kind of like that you started the two agent pairs out on bad footing with each other. Co-writes typically just have the agents meet each other, and it's an instant team—and understandably so. But it's good to see a different dynamic once in a while. I also like that you guys also didn't end the story with the two pairs being Perfect Friends From Now On, but left on a bit of awkward note, yet still with an agreement to go out and eat together. I feel like that's a very realistic, slow progression for real people, especially under the circumstances of their initial meeting.

When I first started reading the mission part and realized that the "inner wolf" nonsense was affecting Ix, I frankly got terrified of the possibilities. Granted, not actually being in wolf form meant that Ix lacked any super-strength, but she still posed a threat to Granz's characters. (Or maybe not to Apecian. What is he, anyway?) I'm glad that Charlotte outclassed Ix physically, and that despite the overall somber mood of this mission (which I do feel was appropriate, considering the badfic's "themes"), you guys didn't actually have any injuries befall the agents. I was a bit concerned at Ix's initial exorcism that you had taken an easy out to that conflict, but of course, Randy wound up being harder to eliminate than that, and stuck around to contribute to the final climax, which feels like the right way to have handled the situation.

So overall, I think you guys handled an utterly repulsive fic in the best way possible, and used the resources you had available to the best possible effect to keep the plot moving along. Well done!

Alas, the following line from your mission is not a full sentence:
"Twin wraiths of urple mist that looked something like distorted versions of Lupin’s werewolf form from the movies."

—doctorlit would like to not think about this fic ever again, please ok thanks

"Okay, so you clearly made some terrible mistake that's going to have far-reaching negative consequences for all of us. You might as well tell us now so we can work together to fix the problem, rather than keeping it secret as long as possible in such manner that makes things worse and harder to fix later, only to reveal the actual problem at the last possible dramatic moment. Agreed?"

The email's on the document that I linked, sopranos are always welcome, and audio would be the most helpful (try downloading Audacity). Can't wait to hear your audition, if you decide to send it!

"As close as I've been able to piece together from the last time he came in, though, he just wants to have fun." She rolled her eyes. "He thinks that messing with me and my guests is fun. I should never have giv--"

The Hostess froze. Her eyes widened. If she hadn't been trying to hide her pause, she would have clamped a hand over her mouth. "--given him the time of day when he first popped up."

He tapped the cane on the floor. "Well, you got killed, we formed a team for exploring, opened a door, and murder fog appeared. We broke it and closed the door again, then your mesages started showing up. And finally the clown showed up." He crossed his arms. "Still not sure I get what his deal is."

"Now, then - what have I missed in my absence?"

"He gave it to me, though..." After a moment, he relented. "Alright, I'll pass it back to him once he heads over here."

"I'm glad you're interested, Wolf. But if you could give the Ghast their Rogue card back, that would be appreciated."

"Like the mystery of where you got these cards." He reached into his hammerspace and pulled out the witch card. "I am intereted/worried about using these. Should be fun."

You have my Discord, right?

She tilted her head towards the Wolf. "But I'll let it stand. Everyone needs a few secrets - they make mysteries more exciting."