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(Wow. I’m getting good at catching confetti.)

ROM Hacks would also be categorized under the Department of Visual Media.

Well, I like the idea of the DUM and the Dumdums. I vote for this new department!

So, awkwardness aside, here's what I was working on.

Somewhat(?) recently, there's been some talk of new Divisions and Departments in the Lounge, so with Quantum's help myriad conversations were gathered into something less chaotic for the general consideration of the Board! But that makes it sound like there's a lot of ideas, when really there's only a couple.

• Division of ABO: While ABO as a genre is possibly most well known for the MPreg elements, not all ABO ends in MPreg, or is even slash. ABO is also much more intense then what DBS agents usually get - even including NC-17 specialized agents. It's like the ESAS of slash, if you will. There was only one suggested flashpatch for this - a wolf howling at a moon.

• Department of Visual Media / Department of Unusual Mediums: There's other kinds of badfic out there, and this was the general idea on how to address that. The DVM/DUM could have divisions for each new medium; comics, videos, etc. It needn't be overly large, as far as Departments go, since the agents could simply be well-versed in their mediums while other agents are sent in for canon knowledge. There were a few ideas for flashpatches, such as cassette tapes and a brand of lollis called Dumdums. And since this is a new Department, department heads were suggested as well: azaleas, garlic and snapdragons.

Under the DVM/DUM could be the Division of Gacha Life Mini Movies: This is the medium that got us talking about this in the first place and - well, I'm not a member of the community, but there's generally a lot of glitter involved, whether it be kidnapping canons and turning them into animal hybrids before tossing them into intimate situations, or general OOC highschool shenanigans. And OC 'Sues. Lots of those.

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I know I don't have permission right now, but quite a few of the other people who were discussing this are.

So basically after looking at the ???th gacha life badfic we thought hey imagine if there was a division/department to spork these things. Shortly after that, the idea for the DUM was born. Here's some basic stuff we mostly agreed on.

It would be called the Department of Unusual Media, or the DUM for short. It would be for missioning badfic like comics, gacha life stories and the like. We were thinking there would probably be a GLMM division because of the large amount of gacha life badfic. We also just about came to the consensus that the flower that would head the department would probably be the snapdragon.

Here's a google doc with screenshots of most of the conversations we had related to this idea (sorry some of them have some out of context sporking mixed in with them).

Yay! Now we both have Permission! throws confetti

Hello! I'm Kittyauthor, but everyone either calls me Kit or Kitty.

For your newbie gift, have a living glass frog!

Welcome! hugs

We already talked a bit on discord, but still - hello! Another member for the aro-ace squad (which I just made up, but let me have my fun :p). I've read most of Uncle Rick's stuff, but I haven't caught up to ToA yet.

For your newbie gift: a color-changing chiapet of your preferred shape!

Hello, and welcome! I like Harry Potter and Percy Jackson too, albeit I've only read the original series and Heroes of Olympus. Oof, that fic sounds bad. I'd say that's the kind of thing that drives a lot of us to spork here, frankly. Anyways, uh, signing off because I'm not sure what else to say.

Hey there fellow aroace! I hope you like it here! As for newbie gifts, I've only got these tomatoes that explode when you throw them.

Welcome to the PPC! I'm into Rick Riordan's books too! That fanfiction looks bad though, so have some Bleeprin.

Hello, my name is KnightofRavenclaw. Well, it's not my actual name, but you get the point. Introduction I'm a rising freshman from the United States (not going to get more specific) and in honor of Pride, I'm about to post my sexuality: Aromantic Asexual. Fandom(s) I'm in too many fandoms at this point, but here are a few prominent ones Harry Potter Percy Jackson (pjo, hoo, toa, kc, etc.) Almost every series by Tamora Pierce (she's amazing, but Keladry and I have philosophical differences) Legend MCU Sherlock The West Wing Madam Secretary The Politician Hamilton

(not) fun fact: When I was around 10, I came across an awful lemon fanfiction about Harry Potter and Hades and I forgot the rest. That scarred me for life, and gave me a permanent motive to disparage such fics.

It's not like I was dying inside as I worried about whether I'd get permission. All is well. Too bad I forgot to clarify the ages though. I'm just happy that a PG got to my request. It is now time for some WRITING

You did ask on Discord, and I did said that I couldn't. Fortunately, I have more time now. Yay! I still don't know the canon, and Mirage seems to have the characters down. I can help you with SPaG though! Would you prefer to send it by email or Discord PM?

I'm not familiar with the canon itself, so I strongly suggest that you get another beta for that (and for SPaG since English isn't my first language), but I can offer some insights on character stuff, plot, structure and phrasing.

E-mail is missfontane at gmail dot com.

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I'm glad Neshomeh got here; I've been feeling a little guilty that I somehow responded to Kittyauthor's request on the same day (since when does same day turnaround happen??) but didn't have the time or energy to do yours as well, both on that day and since then. So, uh, a slight apology that you may or may not need? :)

Anyway: you did it! Hurray! Go forth and write :)

~Z

PS: They're five or so in the first prompt? That makes so much more sense. I liked the interaction well enough when I glanced through it, but without that bit of context it rang a bit strange, especially at the beginning. Childish 18-19 year olds do exist, but one generally doesn't set up playdates for them in the same way one does a small child, y'know? So I'm glad to have the age context now; it makes it all slot properly into place, and changes the last line from "they're going to fall into the PPC soon and be partner-buddies for a while!" to "aw, they're going to stay good friends as they grow up together!"

~Z, kind of sleepy and disclaiming the fact just in case, though I think it might be unnecessary.

Trust me, that never stops happening. The second you're convinced you know everything is the second the Ironic Overpower is going to nail you. It helps to remember Muphry's Law and stay paranoid humble. {= )

IMO, if one really, desperately wanted to "correct" the phrase "if you think that, you've got another think coming," one would write "if you think that, you've got another thought coming," but what fun is that? "Thing" just totally misses the point, though.

You may think some things like the thought of "think vs. thing" thing may not be things worth thinking about, but if you buy that, then I've got a bridge to sell you.

^_~

~Neshomeh

So, I finally got the first draft of my first mission done after several months of procrastination, so looking for betas I guess.

The canon is Plants vs Zombies, and the writing itself is over 8000 words long.

So, um, Discord PMs or gmails work, I think, so I guess that's a thing?

Um. I don't really know how to close these things.

Thanks?

Wow, thanks! Huh, I thought I’d have more to say about how happy I am to have permission, but there’s not much. Uhh... thanks again?

Oh, you do not understand, Neshomeh. Gamer is Goku.

Okay, he’s not, and is not intended to be. I see your points. I was going for building functional machines. Cliches are to be exterminated. Also, who needs complex numbers when you have negative complex numbers?

Oh, darn! They were actually young children (about 5). I had a sentence pointing that out, but it sounded really weird so I removed it. Relocating the information must’ve slipped through editing...

Whenever I think I have a mastery of English grammar, it’s like concepts I’ve never heard of appear just to spite me. A “conditional ‘were’” has never been brought to my attention in my life.

For the record, I read this article about the think/thing thing that now I think I should have another think about. Thing is more used nowadays so I thought I could go with the more common version. Then again, if think is really right, I think I have another think coming about the think/thing thing that I think I’m confused about. Though I’m thinking that the think/thing thing I’m trying to confuse you with is just another thing that I think I should go with the older definition for.

Whew, that was a mouthful. This was really jumbled up and probably could be improved. But do I feel like doing that? No. I feel like celebrating! 🎉 🥳

(Ugh, I started writing a response to this and accidentally wiped it out. Starting over.)

I'll start by saying Permission Granted! The second prompt made me laugh, I like the characters together, and I've seen you around, so that's all good. The badfic looks suitably bad, too. Those run-on sentences, yikes! It reminds me of my own writing as a much younger person, tbh, but since the fic is five years old I'm not worried about it.

Now, I do have a sheaf of notes for you. Please don't be scared, most of the comments are minor things and a couple of them are good! {= )

Bios:

• Gamer's bio makes me raise my eyebrows. The first paragraph in particular has some pretty cliched stuff in it, and I don't see anything in the writing prompts to make me believe he deserves such over-the-top descriptions. He's a teenager from World One, not, like, Goku or something. Take it down a notch! Also, reading and tinkering with technology does not, sadly, guarantee intelligence. How does he tinker, exactly? Most kids tend to stop at the "taking things apart" step. Does Gamer build stuff? Does it work, or is it pretend stuff? (I'm reminded of my best friend at age six or so, who built a "satellite" in his closet out of Lego Technic pieces and other random bits of toys, with the goal of detecting alien life. We took it very seriously, but we were six, y'know? It was never going to actually work!) I like that you acknowledge that he's arrogant, though.

• Lilith's bio is more balanced, and I like that she's a foil to Gamer's tendency to be too full of himself. The line "eyes that seem to stare into your soul" is another big cliche, though. Watch out for stuff like that. Also, the combination of that with her excited smile sounds creepy! Is that what you intended?

• There's already a Response Center i, so I'm not sure you can get away with having a Response Center √-1, too. What about -i instead?

First prompt:

• I was extremely confused at first about why Gamer's parents were setting up an 18-year-old on a play date. It's possible that I wouldn't have been quite as confused if I'd read the story in the absence of the bios, but I still don't know how old the two kids are supposed to be. General writing advice: remember Person, Place, and Time (PPT). Make sure the reader can always identify who the characters are, what the setting is, and where in time they are, especially if it's the first scene or if the details change between scenes.

• Missing line break after the second paragraph.

• If you use American styling, periods and commas always go inside the quotation marks. “social interaction”. --> “social interaction.”

• I like the detail of Gamer being so unused to the outdoors that everything seems too bright.

• Returning to the concept of PPT, there's an issue with the T here. I'm not sure why the sun is setting right after they eat lunch. They've only been there a few hours, right? Since they packed lunch, they left home in the morning, right? Very confused.

• When using smart quotes, make sure your apostrophes are apostrophes, not opening single quotes. ‘bout --> ’bout

• I'm not sure what you mean by "he smiled a short reflection on the experience." I don't think a smile can create a short reflection. {= )

Second prompt:

• In general, I enjoyed this a lot. It was lighthearted and fun, and if I question the logistics a little bit, it's not so out there that I can't say to myself "It's the PPC, I should really just relax." ^_^

• I like that Gamer got smacked with the consequences of creating all those excess exclamation points.

• Missing line break before "The showerhead finally stopped."

• We have to talk about the conditional "were." See this page for more information, but in general, phrases like this: "as if it wasn’t connected" are written correctly as "as if it weren't connected." There are a few of these in this piece. (And the thing you called me on in my piece above is correct for the same reason. How red are your cheeks right now? ^_~ )

• Another American style issue: your em dashes should not have spaces on either side.

• "After you pranked me (stupid exclamation points...), I left the RC to send some water through the pipes and prank you." That parenthetical aside has no business being in that line of dialogue. Try saying the sentence out loud. Weird, isn't it? {= )

• The phrase is "you've got another think coming." (And the linked website is an excellent resource.)

And there you have it. In general, if you watch out for those over-the-top cliches, remember PPT, and have fun writing your characters, I think you're going to do just fine. ^_^

~Neshomeh

Google Docs does weird things to my writing, and I can't fix them from here. If you've looked at my Permission Request, you'll have noticed the thread between Zingenmir and me. She saw the errors, but I couldn't. I sure hope to find out what's messing with me, though!

And anyway, thanks for the feedback! I'm still trying to figure out how to write emotion changes better, which will (hopefully) get better with time.

Glad you liked my agents!

It’s a really nice poem. The rhymes were nice, and neither they or the lines’ content look too contrived. This is a great poem, but what if my fandom doesn’t have women?

Yes, that was a joke.

Ah man, what a great read! I finally have some backstory now. I actually read Agent Cameo’s page on the wiki earlier. Spoilers for the interlude Too bad I spoiled myself...

Oh, I forgot to mention: after the time skip, I’m pretty sure “time weren’t” should be “time wasn’t”. You might want to check that out.