Welp. That sure was some smut. And I think I agree with your in-character assessment that the author just didnât know a lot of details about Middle-earth, like âArwen existsâ and âthe Brandybucks and Tooks are relatives.â
I donât think Iâve seen a slash mission that divided the exorcisms up into sections like this before. It was interesting seeing how the circumstances in each one necessitated different plans of action from the agents. Iâm especially amused by having to neuralyze Merry and Pippin into continuing the badfic, just so things wouldnât go off the rails down the line. I also find it funny that the wraith possessing Aragorn and Legolas was so much weaker than the other two (being a smoochy-face wraith and not a pants-down wraith) that it just got shouted out of existence. Makes sense!
Yeah, making romantic love out to be more valid than friendship love irritates me, too. And we certainly have enough of that sentiment rattling around in pop culture as it is. I hope Liz (and you) arenât too put-out over this experience!
A couple lines with missing words:
âShe was playing something on her 3DS, having to somewhat awkwardly hold onto without disturbing Vulpix.â
I forget the fancy phrasing, but that second sentence is missing a âtargetâ for the verb âhold,â which makes the 3DS kind of vanish from the thought.âawkwardly hold onto it withoutâ will fix things up.
âSummoning and shattering a mirror, the bit died with a face full of glass.â
Since Avery is absent from this sentence, it sounds like the bit elf is doing the mirror magic. Couple of possible fixes; this one changes the least from your original sentence:
âSummoning and shattering a mirror, Avery left the bit dead with a face full of glass.â
But there lots of ways to fix that, if that version doesnât feel right for you.
âdoctorlit, also acearo, mostly, probably