As a few other people already noted, there's been quite a few people jumping in to add in their two cents, whether it's trying to be helpful to Bramandin or to add in to shouting them down.

Please note, this is a request. I can't make you stop, if you really decide to. Neither can anyone else. Your behavior and decisions all rely on you.

At the very least, keep the Constitution in mind.

While you haven't (that I've noticed) named the particular disability you've been talking about, the particular way you have been communicating implies that you may be autistic. I apologize if this assumption is wrong; however, as it is the most plausible one I have, I am posting the rest of this post under that assumption.

So... hi, fellow autist. I only wish this could be under better circumstances. And... yeah, I'm a bit angry with you too, which I am only stating in case this gets into a "but you *agreed* with me" situation -- unlikely, yes, but I have always felt the need to prepare for unlikely circumstances.

Anyway, I have a from-personal-experience piece of advice for you: don't respond to criticism, constructive or not, immediately. I'll freely note that I used to get cry-y just getting typos pointed out to me. I also got... well, defensive isn't quite the right word -- more "ready to just up and delete whatever it was so that people aren't mad at me." I managed to get over that last part, eventually, but it was a long and grueling experience. Honestly, the PPC helped me a lot. It's okay if it's not the place for you, but even just taking the badfics the PPC missions as 'what not to do' lists helped a great deal. Especially to make me less-afraid of "said." Though I *still* have a hard time using "stated..."

Well, anyway. What I'm saying is that I have some personal experience with what's going on here. For me it went like "frantically try to appease person, get embarrassed, abandon/delete fic, regret everything." It, well... looks like your response is to get angry at people. Now, I'm not saying that automatically makes you a bad person. I don't think you're a bad person.

Anyway, I'm possibly getting off-topic. I know it probably seems like you *have* to respond to criticism immediately. But for people like us, whose first reactions are probably not the reactions we'd like to have... take some time to wait. I don't know how much time -- my guideline was "wait until the tight, terrified feeling in your stomach goes away, or at the very least until the crying stops." It's helped me handle things much better, and I don't have the same "visceral terror" reaction to people not liking something anymore. (There's a thing I figured out, which basically feels like holding my brain steady, but there are no words in the English language to describe how it works and so I cannot usefully share that.)

I hope I have helped.

-- TheShyIon

For one, if Kelly doesn't feel passionate enough about fandoms that are popular enough to have fanfiction...then why is she in the PPC? The PPC is all about protecting canon from bad fanfic, preserving canon as it should be. Badfic is the norm that everyone deals with in some way or another, whether tht be slaying Sues, taking care of Suvian offspring and raisng them to not be like mommy and daddy, or whatever. It's like going into, say, engineering without being interested in engineering. It makes no sense.

Also, with the bear - interesting idea, but one flaw. There is no ways bears can sneak like what I assume you mean her to sneak for. I'm assuming that Kelly is in the DMS, so yeah, sneaking is a needed ability, but bears aren't that quiet. Far from what's required. Hide, probably. Sneak, no way, unless she picked a good D.O.R.K.S. form and trained extensively in that to sneak well.

I suppose it's a tad too late for a review, then.

Okay, your agent bio pages give me a few things that are eyebrow raising.

To start with, Kelly. You say she's aloof and guarded. She secretly cares about her partners. That's... it? We don't get much more? Your personality bit is just a few traits thrown together and don't really tell us how she acts or reacts to things. I could cut off the bit that tells us she reads trashy romance and it suddenly applies to a good deal of agents.

Why/how would Kelly have her sister's family just up and moved to a different continuum? Do they not have an extended family that would presumbly wonder where they went? Or her brother-in-law's family? Did her sister and b-i-l not have any say in the matter? This is a random thing that doesn't really... tell us anything.

Neuralyzer-immunity granting implants- I admit, it's been well over a decade since I watched the MiB cartoon, but I'm pretty sure I don't remember anything like that being canonical or even suggestibly canonical; the neuralyzer is pretty much the go-to tool in the MiB canons for preserving the secret that aliens are on Earth. The Ben 10 universe also has no real reason to negate such a thing- the Plumbers exist for a reason.

The agents who recruited her could have very easily had it removed or used any other alternative method to erase her memories and toss her back into her home-fic.

There's also a difference between being irreligious and telling off Aslan, who in his canon, most certainly exists and generally doesn't do anything to actually deserve being told off by a random PPC agent.

Injerd: Why does she have two names? Why the mention of usually a beard in disguise? You did not tell us much at all in this tiny bio.

Agent TBD: Holy macaroni, was that the general alarm I heard on the boat just now? Nope, it was just me reading this part:

'The rest of her personality will be determined once I’ve figured out how to build the perfect agent.'

The perfect agent does not exist.

This last one alone tells me you don't quite understand what we do with character creation as far as the PPC goes, if you make characters wholecloth for the setting.

As far as your stories go:

You have SpaG. Well done. There's a general forward movement in the writing, which indicates you have an understanding of time and movement.

Buuut you don't really show or do anything in the stories themselves. The characters show no real fleshing out. They actually seem kind of... boring, to be honest.

Random note about the first story with Agent TBD: I am currently wearing the blouse for a Navy Working Uniform right now in fact. I'm not entirely sure what you're going for with that sentence about it having faded first prior to dying. Is it because it's implied to be old? Because it doesn't work that way. Which is to say, if I were to take a brand new one, and shove it into one of the washers on the ship with a black dye packet it would turn it completely black without having to wait for it to fade (which would happen if I decided to just stand outside in the desert sun for a few hours. Easy peasy.). I would also gain some enemies in the Supply Department, but that is beside the point. Please both research things you include- because it will make people go '...No?' upon reading if they actually know the item in question- and make sure that you are clear about what you are talking about.

Lastly...

While I cannot speak for others, I did hear that you were giving others a difficult time when you asked for assistance with working on your characters and writing samples for asking for permission.

As a community, when people ask for help, we are all generally willing to give it if we have the time.

That said, it's incredibly frustrating when that advice gets ignored or tossed out; when that happens the result is people are generally less inclined to work with said person in the future when they ask for help again.

Boarders are not some mechanical tool to use to check something and then ignore if the results are not to your liking.

All that said,

Permission denied.

-July

When you asked me and Des for advice, I knew it was being ignored, but I didn't realize it was to this extent.

I'm just going to let one of the other PGs deal with this. :/

One of the agents gets a new partner.

In {RC number,} Kelly was lounging in an office chair and reading “The Giver.” She thought that the book was alright, but it wasn’t something that she would have chosen. She really didn’t feel passionately about anything that was popular enough to have fanfiction, so she mostly dealt in canons where their departments were overwhelmed, or where no one had admitted to liking them.

The console [bip]ed, and Kelly read the message. She was happy that she wouldn’t have to be without a partner for too long this time, though also a little bit disappointed that she was losing her last one. She had actually hoped that he would beat the statistics, but she knew that there was always something that could go wrong.

There was a heavy knock at the door, and Kelly answered it. A grizzly bear was sitting in the middle of the hallway in front of her door. If it had been standing upright, it probably would have been between eight or nine feet tall. It had a gruff female voice. “I am Injerd.”

“Do you need me to open a portal to Medical?” Kelly knew that there were intelligent beasts running around Headquarters, and she had dealt with far stranger than that even before she joined the PPC.

The bear shook her head. “My name is Injerd. You may also call me Ingeborg or simply Ing if you must. Someone in orientation thought that it would be funny to introduce myself by saying ‘I am.’ I was told that I was assigned to {RC}.”

Kelly glanced at the plate on her door just in case her number had been changed again. She didn’t mind working with an animal, despite what happened last time. “Come on in. My name’s Kelly Stone.”

Injerd rocked forward and then walked through the door on all fours. She then looked at the couch and took a seat in front of the bookcase instead.

“I’ve just got to pack up my last partner’s stuff,” Kelly said, grabbing a cardboard box.

“What happened to him?” Ing asked.

“It was a mistake,” Kelly said dismissively, though she felt a bit guilty. Once she had learned that zabvronians gain nourishment from reading, she should have realized that he shouldn’t have been looking at the words in a bad grammar fic. Kelly just hoped that Mike Ditka would recover from his equivalent of food poisoning eventually.

Kelly then smiled. “Why don’t you tell me about yourself so I can get to know you better?” She wasn’t really curious about Ing’s personal life, but the more she knew about her new partner, the more likely it was that she could make up for any of her shortcomings.

“I come from Narnia. I was but a cub when King Peter and his siblings disappeared.” Ing paused. “The details of my life are hard to remember, as if they’re from a dream.”

Kelly wasn’t too concerned. She knew that some people didn’t have much of a past to work with. “Do you know how to hide and sneak around? What about fighting?”

Ing paused a moment before answering. “I was not trained to fight against Calormenes, but I do know how to defend myself. As for sneaking, I believe that I will learn quickly.”

Kelly hated having to figure things out as she went along, but such was the nature of being an agent, especially one who was always given fresh recruits as temporary partners.

... the purpose of the samples.

(I'm basing this purely on your second sample, since the first (as Hardric said) isn't accessible.)

There's a couple of reasons we ask you to write something for this.

1/ To see if you can spell, punctuate, etc. Great, you can.

2/ To see if you can show us your agents' character through your writing. I haven't read the bios, so what do I know about your agents' personalities?

-Kelly doesn't have strong emotions about things (eg, books), or emotional reactions to things (eg, bear, injured partner).
-Ing... may have a sense of humour, or may not realise she was being mocked for her name, or may not care.

That's... it. Your story shows me absolutely nothing of their characters. Given the "I have stated a fact about myself, now please state a fact about yourself" feel of the latter part, I'm not convinced they are characters.

3/ To see if you can capture the feel of the PPC.

Um... yeah, no. Change a few of the words around, and this could take place in any office.

So here's my question: what appeals to you, personally, about the PPC setting? What aspects of it do you enjoy reading about, thinking about? And how can you work those into even such a short story as this one?

PG hat is not being worn right now, though it's definitely to hand.

hS

The Agents Receive a Mission.

{RC} was usually fairly quiet. While it was true that the console tended to beep whenever the agents were relaxing, it would cease to become funny if it never gave them any downtime.

Agent Kelly Stone was playing a game of chess against the computer. As a child, she hadn’t been encouraged to develop her intelligence, but she still was fairly smart. However, even with the difficulty turned down to three, Kelly was still losing. She didn’t mind because she was still improving.

Agent {To Be Determined} was sewing a patch onto her new uniform. Unlike her first uniform shirt, which had started life as a man’s dress-shirt, this one used to be part of the Navy Working Uniform. Its camouflage pattern had faded before the shirt was dyed black.

[BEEEEEEEE~]

Kelly slammed her hand on the “accept” button and began reading. “It’s for Chappie. Oh, you might want to make a backup. ‘They run into the rooms and wore on their weapons.’”

{TBD} had managed to stab her finger with the needle when the console went off. She had quietly put her finger in her mouth, but now she took it out. “Noted. You said it was ‘Chappie, right? Is that a movie?” At Kelly’s nod, {TBD} brought out her tablet and began swiping at the screen. A few minutes later, she pulled a bonnet-style hairdryer out of her bed’s headboard and laid down with her head in it. She winced as the device glowed blue for a moment, then she said “Ready to go.”

Kelly was already ready because she insisted on preparing for the next mission as soon as she returned from one. Previous partners had accused her of being OCD, but she just knew that being extremely organized made life much easier in the long run.

Kelly double-checked their bag of supplies and grabbed some extra bleeperin for herself. She was almost jealous of how {TBD} could just use her device to blunt the memories of missions. Of course, using Dollhouse technology meant that {TBD} couldn’t take any bleep products and had to wait until the mission was over to get any relief.

They stepped through the portal and were immediately assaulted with a hailstorm of seeds.

The Agents

Basic info - Kelly Stone, Human, 29, female, Earth

Appearance - 5’6, dark hair, dark eyes, skinny

Personality - She’s guarded and aloof. She’s not too mean, but she usually doesn’t act nice unless it will get her an advantage. Though every once in a while she’ll soften and give clues that she actually cares about her partners a little. She reads trashy romance. She’s very picky and won’t eat food of questionable origin.

History -She originally came from a story where the MIB cartoon-verse intersects with the Ben 10 universe. She was working as an assistant / receptionist for an alien that was running a fake ghost-chasing business. She has an older sister, a niece, a nephew, and her sister’s husband. Kelly had them moved to the Muppet universe because it was safer.

When Kelly first came to the PPC, she had implants that made her immune to neuralysers. She had them removed within a few months because magic started making them give her migranes. The agents that recruited her neglected to tell anyone that they recruited her because the neuralyser failed to work on her.

Kelly is irreligious. She also told off Aslan at one point, so all of her Narnia missions are before that incident.

The department- I think rare fandoms is part of the Floaters division? She’s also an agent trainer, but it’s not on-paper official.

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Basic info - Injerd or Ingeborg, Narnian bear, female

Appearance - She pretty much looks like a grizzly bear with a harness.

Personality - She’s patient and pretty easy-going, though can go from fine to roaring rage in a heartbeat.

History - She was a bit character. She hasn’t grown much beyond that yet.

When using the disguise generator, she prefers to have a beard.

The department - She might go into APD for Narnia after she’s transferred away from Kelly.

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Basic info - To Be Determined, female.

History - TBD will be recruited from a story I once saw mocked. If I can’t find it again, I’ll create an outline from what I remember and invent the rest. She was a bit character who was unceremoniously killed off-screen after criticizing the main character. Her one defining trait was that she was a bitch.

She stayed in FicPsych for several months without making progress on growing a good personality. She was about to be put out of her misery when FicPsych gained Dollhouse technology.

She has a murderous hatred of Sues. The rest of her personality will be determined once I’ve figured out how to build the perfect agent.

The Dollhouse technology can reprogram her personality at any time, but I want to keep it fairly consistent with exceptions for character growth. Even though it is ideal for instantly gaining skills Matrix-style, she prefers to limit herself to only gaining canon knowledge, similar to being a walking pocket fictionary. She can’t take bleep-products, but she can blunt any memories she wants to after the mission is over.

The department - Floaters / rare fandoms. Kelly will probably transfer out if I want to give TBD a new partner.