Subject: SUDDEN WHIPLASH
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Posted on: 2018-06-28 03:18:00 UTC
By which I mean... aaawwww. ;;
Wobbles does many a Good, for EVERYONE! The Notary very much included.
Subject: SUDDEN WHIPLASH
Author:
Posted on: 2018-06-28 03:18:00 UTC
By which I mean... aaawwww. ;;
Wobbles does many a Good, for EVERYONE! The Notary very much included.
*ahem*
It's been two weeks (although it feels like longer for some reason), so that means two more prompts to get your teeth (or any other body part I guess) into. Take a look at these juicy prompts and see what you can come up with (thanks to Ix and Thoth for unknowingly providing me with the ideas for the prompts this week).
Prompt 1: One of your characters disappears
Prompt 2: One of your characters is teasing another about something.
Novastorme
The pink floor-thing was really tugging on Anne’s mop. Its suction seemed to increase the more she pulled back on it and soon the mop’s handle was beginning to creak and she was feeling it right back in her joints. Her arms were beginning to feel disturbingly disconnected from her torso. She hrrrm-ed to herself for a while until she saw small cracks begin to spider around the floor. This struck her as somewhat not good.
‘Hey, Bingle?’ She glanced around the corridor. It was still. There was an eerie silence, except for the squelching, stretching sounds of the pink floor-things.
‘Hey, Finch?’ She glanced around again. An air conditioner hummed. The lights beamed. It was graveyard-silent. Somewhere in the distance a wolf howled.
She released the mop and in a blinding flurry of movements that went SNAP! CLACK! SQUORRSH! the mop was totally absorbed into the pink floor-thing. Anne was pretty sure she heard something like chewing, as she walked down the corridor, around the corner, to Ninetwo.
Ninetwo was in the exact same situation Anne had been in. She was quivering and tugging and exhaling until Anne said: ‘Hey, hrrm, Ninetwo-’ at which point she yelped, hopped away, and watched as the pink floor-thing ate her mop.
Umm! Anne! Hello! And she saluted, trying to ignore the crunching snaps of the mop behind her.
‘Have you seen Bingle?’
Umm?
‘Have you seen Finch?’
Umm?
‘Well?’
Ninetwo rubbed her seedclock. Oh, um, no, they’ve been gone for a while. They disappeared hours ago.
‘You didn’t tell anyone?’ asked Anne with a raised eyebrow.
Ninetwo was immediately on the defensive. They - they almost always disappear! Nearly every shift, the both of them go completely AWOL and only reappear when the shift is over! I would suggest that it’s the both of them dodging their duties but that would be rude of me and against the principles of the PPC, so I won’t!
‘Huh,’ said Anne. ‘Okay.’ And she shrugged and walked off for a new mop.
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‘Oh, just you wait, Finch,’ Bingle said, rattling in his chains. ‘They’ll be here any moment. Just you wait.’
‘Sure.’
‘With the Security Dandelions in tow, and perhaps even an assassin or two as backup!’
‘I bloody well bet.’
‘Oh, believe me this,’ Bingle said, gazing, hardfaced, into the blackness of the cell they were sharing. ‘They will be here, any moment now. Any second. Just you wait.’
So par for the course, for Larf.
I'm not 100% sure the imprisonment had anything to do with the pink stuff. That's how I took it.
The imprisonment had more to do with the hellish lunacy Finch and Bingle inexplicably end up getting into, while off duty (or just over their general course of existence.)
Probably could've tried finding a way to maybe expound the context more, just a little, ay?
Of course, the lack of context, too, was rather important. Who knows!
This all felt like something that might happen in HQ, and everyone feels in character.
I do want to know what the heck happened to Finch and Bingle though.
- Tomash
Goofs and gaffs and spoofs and spaffs and gadzookery.
For real, though, I was considering expounding more on why they were there and so on (more of Bingle's rubbish magic experiments he does to pass the time while they're skipping duties or such), but I couldn't really find a way to fit it in without kind of mucking up the punchline.
At least one pair of characters has clearly gotten themselves into trouble! XD
Are any of the four characters human, by chance? I get the impression Anne and Ninetwo, at least, aren't.
Anne is, in fact, the token human of Shift Twentieth! Bingle is sorta-human (he's a dead wizard) and Finch and Ninetwo are respectively a sapient vending machine and a dandelion. Anne's cat, who isn't in this one, is a cat.
I suppose I do kind of characterise her as being very much the most inhuman out of them, so that's good, innit?
And Finch and Bingle basically live in a constant unending state of trouble.
Those darn hooligans.
Talia peeked her head into RC65536+3i "Erm, hello?"
Thoth looked up from his perusal of Renegades of Pern. "Ah. Talia. What seems to be the issue?"
"I was looking for Tom, actually. Said he'd keep me company on shift, and then never showed. So, have seen him, big guy?"
"I have not, since..." Thoth frowned. "Three days ago. Most unusual."
"Odd..." said Talia, rubbing her forehead in thought. "I don't suppose you could use some magical to track him down or something?"
"I could. But I see no sense in doing so. He will appear. I am sure of it. In any case, I have my studies to attend to." He put his head back into the book.
Talia promptly turned and banged her head on the wall. It wasn't actually a hard bang, just one for comedic effect. "So... let me get this straight. We have a simple, easy way to locate your missing partner, but you won't do it because you're too lazy, and you think he'll turn up on his own in a place like HQ. Instead, you're reading second-rate 80's fantasy in an attempt to get a grumpy alcoholic with emotional problems to like you."
Thoth turned a page. "Believe what you will."
"Well... THAT'S STUPID!"
At that precise moment, Tom staggered through the door. His eyes were bloodshot, his hair mussed, and his clothes looked like they had seen three days without a wash (which they had). He promptly collapsed into his chair/improvised bed. Thoth didn't bother looking up.
"Tom?" Talia asked, concerned. "What the heck happened to you? Are you alright? Why didn't you join me on shift? What could have done this?"
Tom grinned tiredly. "It..."
"Yes?"
"It was..."
"Come on, say it!"
"It was..."
"...You're really doing this. Really. Just so we're clear, if you say anything about soap, I'm going to murder you."
"It was... d-d-Dark... Souls..."
RC65536+3i seemed to grow quiet for a moment. And then...
"SERIOUSLY?"
Meanwhile, Thoth continued to read, relatively unperturbed.
Always fun to see characters who don't usually interact get a chance to do so.
"a grumpy alcoholic with emotional problems" - Yeah, that's roughly accurate. {= ) I don't think he's quite an alcoholic, but it was clearly just a matter of time had circumstances not intervened. (And circumstances were always planned to intervene, just not the ones that got there first.)
I think Talia's "What could have done this?" is a little overdramatic, but having just now checked out the soap reference, I guess it's part of the shtick. I'm not sure Talia was in on it at that point, though? I mean, she was actually worried about Tom; I wouldn't expect her to start joking around until she was sure he was okay. (Though I'm with Thoth that going missing for a few days in HQ isn't really as worrisome as one might think; these things happen.)
And if she WAS in on it then, she'd have only herself to blame if he did claim it was soap poisoning. Which is what I'd suggest to make the joke a little easier to pick up on: "If you claim it was soap poisoning, I'm going to murder you."
Cuz. Uh. I wouldn't have gotten it anyway, but at least it would've stopped my brain from reaching for the usual places oblique mentions of soap point to. >.<
Noticed a couple missing words:
- "So, have [you] seen him, big guy?"
- "I don't suppose you could use some magical [trick/ability/power/...] to track him down or something?"
Video games are a helluva drug. {; P
~Neshomeh
I'll confess, Talia's line was a tad overdramatic. I now recall a tiny voice telling me something like that when I was writing this.
I should listen to that tiny voice more often. It might be the voice of sanity and reason.
No, the correct line from here would have been more along the lines of "What the heck was it that got you like this?" or perhaps, "What the hell were you doing, I had to sit alone on shift, do you have any idea how boring that is?" Or something.
Ah well. For the rewrites, if I ever polish this one up.
Thanks for finding the missing words, by the way. That's always helpful.
Overall, neat, funny scene, I think it does a good job of showing off people's characters (though mainly Thoth's independent/"Tom can handle himself, I've got my own thing going" strain).
I'm not sure what the soap line was supposed to mean though.
- Tomash
Loves his film references.
Talia is having none of it.
...Honestly, that may be a bit too obscure in the way it's done.
Pern is fifth-rate '80s fantasy, thank you very much.
On a more serious note, this was a fun story, at least in part because it adds another place where Wobbles Should Never Go Ever. =]
As for Pern being fifth-rate... Isn't fith-rate the bottom, usually? I think we need somewhere to put all the nonsense we can't remember because it was so bland below Pern. And somewhere to put Xanth and Gor below that... Besides, I like Pern, so through the power of Willful Delusion, I can say it's first rate. :-P
I mean, I did find the punchline funny regardless, but still. XD
That he set up a console in a diused RC so nobody could disturb him.
But who knows? I just had him vanish for the joke.
Yeah, I forgot to put these in the main post. So... well, yeah. Tom goes missing to play a video game. Not really surprising, I figured it was the reason that would make the most sense.
Fun fact: The original idea for this prompt was an elaborate parody (read: theft) of the "Airline Pilots" sketch from the Proto-Monty-Python British TV special How To Irritate People (Which, notably, also contained the "Job Interview" sketch which would go on to feature on Python proper, the "Car Salesman" sketch, which is the direct ancestor of the now-famous Parrot Sketch, and the introduction of the "pepperpots," a Python mainstay). Why didn't I do this? Because I got bored, didn't want to write it, wasn't sure if it fit, wasn't sure if it was a good idea, and really was too busy playing Dark Souls.
WARNING: Minor spoilers for Star Wars: The Old Republic: Knights of the Fallen Empire/Knights of the Eternal Throne.
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The room felt empty without his presence, the two had never been alone with each other in a room before now, before the events on Ziost it had been always been at least Theo accompanying them, and after they'd had a war to fight and win and personal time had never come around. At least not until now, while the rest of the resistance on Odessen and around the galaxy celebrated, their leader and one of her closest confidants stood in a soundproofed, de-bugged room away from all prying eyes and ears and could just talk about the Mandalorian Bounty Hunter.
"He's really gone?" Naonae, known to many in the galaxy as The Outlander, asked, knowing the answer but still not quite able to believe it.
"He is." Pariya replied, nodding despite the fact she knew the Miralukan would not be able to see the gesture. "Disappeared searching for you not long after the Eternal Empire invaded. I was too busy with the Rift Alliance at the time to stop him from heading off, how he convinced the rest of his crew to not go along I have no idea."
Silence lingered between the two force users for a time before Naonae cleared it.
"He was a good friend, even for a Bounty Hunter. He will be missed." She turned her head towards the Zabrak, the grief of the Jedi obvious through the Force to her. "And I am sure he was a good Husband as well."
Pariya nodded again, blinking the tears out of her eyes, not caring about the other Jedi Masters that said showing emotions was a weakness, at least not caring about it now that she was with her closest, definitely still living friend, strange as it was to think of the Sith Lord like that.
"Even for a Bounty Hunter," She added after a second. "I will miss him indeed."
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Novastorme
Especially the bit with Pariya (who I'm assuming from context is a Jedi) crying.
- Tomash
Short, but... emotional? Bittersweet isn't the right word for this.
Anyway, even for one lacking the context like myself, this snippet conveys what's going on just fine.
That was definitely feels-inducing. Not much else to say other than ow.
One day in the happy world of Headquarters, something very peculiar happened. Wobbles The Clown was missing! All the boys and girls and nonbinary life forms were very confused, because Wobbles made sure to tell all her friends if she was going away, and Wobbles was friends with everyone.
Everyone in the Nursery decided to go and look for Wobbles, because she might have gotten lost or fallen down a plothole, and that could be dangerous - or worse, boring. So off they went on an Adventure.
They looked in the Floating Hyacinth's office, but Wobbles wasn't there.
They looked in Wobbles The Clown's RC, but Wobbles wasn't there either.
They weren't allowed to look in Rudi's, but a friendly Security Dandelion did instead, and it said Wobbles wasn't there either.
They looked in the A/V Division offices, but the grown-ups there were not very friendly and screamed and threw things and one did a wee in his trousers, and worst of all Wobbles still wasn't there!
Where, oh where could Wobbles be?
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"I... I really appreciate you doing this for me." The Notary looked immaculate, and it was only when you got close by that you could see the age and tiredness in her eyes.
"Ah-buh-buh-buh-buh! I'm doing this with you. The hard work is all on you." Wobbles would normally have offered a hug, but the way the Notary was trembling meant she stayed a pace or two away.
"I know, I know. I'm just..." The Notary sighed, quiet and old as an empty church. "Thank you."
Wobbles smiled and said nothing.
The door in front of them eventually opened, and a much shorter woman greeted the two and welcomed them into her office. In a few moments, it clicked shut, revealing a sign that said Nurse Jennifer Robinson, FicPsych.
The old Time Lord sat, and spoke, and when the tears and shaking and pain dragged themselves to the surface, Wobbles was there.
Right where she needed to be.
Actually, it's too late. He'd already put the idea in motion before you posted this. So this is really just fuel for his dark machinations. >.>;
Anyway, I share the sentiment of "Holy Emotional Whiplash, Batman!" That second scene is a real slap in the face.
I'm not surprised that Wobbles is being supportive of the Notary, though. I'm surprised the Notary is letting her.
Jenni, of course, is completely on board and probably breaking out in a sweat from the effort of not saying "It's about time!" And there will be tea, much tea, provided Wobbles stays away from the electric kettle. And cuddles and possibly treats for Lolus, too. {= )
~Neshomeh
So the Notary's had a lot of time to come to terms with help always being available in Headqwarts to those who ask for it. The growth's true for Wobbles as well - she's making much less of an effort to be HAPPYSMILESUPERFUNTIMEWHEE around the Notary and trying a lot harder to be her friend. Characters evolving over time: it Am An Thing. =]
And yeah, I kinda assumed Jenni would be fine with it from previous interactions involving Jennotari friendshipping/outrightshipping. Those were super fun, btw, we should definitely do more of that some time. =]
I like the children's book-like style in the first part. I'll note that it feels like a very appropriate style for a story about Wobbles (especially since, if you're reading for the first time, it looks like it'll be a rather comedic one).
And then the scene changes, and we have this rather serious (and heartwarming) emotional scene with the Notary and Wobbles. One think I liked about this section is that you did a good job of using the narration to convey the Notary's emotions.
(Minor note: the "quiet and old as an empty church" simile, while understandable, felt like it didn't quite make sense.)
- Tomash
Thanks for the compliments, too! I'm glad you liked the narration - I was trying to do the show-don't-tell thing, but without using dialogue as a crutch for that. =]
Not much else to say. Wobbles being supportive of the Notary was unexpected but sweet.
By which I mean... aaawwww. ;;
Wobbles does many a Good, for EVERYONE! The Notary very much included.
The shot was fired from behind. Point blank, from behind a cardboard box. In a flash of explosive light, the bullet left the chamber, piercing the cardboard, and approached Harrison's spine. In an instant, he vanished. The bullet might not have hit him, if it was any further away. But the bullet had vanished with him. The bullet hit, far away, in a dark safe room, somewhere miles away underground. Or maybe not. Harrison was gone, and so was the bullet.
It was written off as a failed mission. The target had gotten away.
Or maybe he wasn't lucky enough.
Two weeks pass. There were no more sightings of Harrison. No more tears in reality. No more extra hours of daylight, or unending night. No more. -
Or the bullet hadn't hit and he is merely biding his time. Maybe he is taking the chance to finally disappear. A fake death. A get out of jail free card.
A rare opportunity for a man like him. He should get what he deserves.
Another month passed.
He was only human, after all. Wasn't he? He seemed more machine than man. More animal than human. He was strong. Powerful. But a bullet can change all of that in an instant.
Harrison is presumed dead, succumbing to his injuries.
He was a force to be reckoned with. He defended many people. He helped many. But he harmed many, many more. He never showed his hand, and was trusted by nobody. He got what he deserved.
Harrison is dead. Whatever phenomena is occurring is not connected to him whatsoever. His house has fallen over a patch of farmland. Constant streams of ash pour out. A small amount of partially damaged golems currently roam, but will be contained and destroyed. Harrison is dead, and the dead have no hold over the living.
The golems began screeching at 9:04 pm, Tuesday evening. Simply bashing them with hammers wasn't enough. Attempts to move and contain them have failed. Harrison must have had batteries somewhere continuing their power. They will die soon enough.
After eight weeks, the golems have finally been silenced. Twenty ton deadweights; it was simpler to bury them than to move them. The house fire ceased, and was promptly demolished and shipped to a proper disposal site. An anticlimactic conclusion to the end of his tale.
And now, for some final words: Good riddance.
I think I see what you're trying to do here, slowly building up the impression of the world (I guess?) that this guy is really gone while also leaving it eerily ambiguous. Even if he's dead, his legacy clearly lives on in some fashion. It's a cool idea.
I'm thrown off by the tense changes and inconsistent paragraphing, though. Are those things deliberate? If so, I can't work out the meaning to them. Are you trying to show a meta effect of Harrison's ability to mess with reality? I'm confused.
Also, some SPaG:
- "approached" is a very passive word for a speeding bullet and doesn't tell us how close it got.
- You want "farther" for physical distances; "further" is for everything else.
- Stray hyphen at the end of the fourth paragraph.
- "phenomena" is plural, so the phrase should be "phenomena are ... are not connected" or "phenomenon is ... is not connected".
- "amount" is for uncountable measures. Golems are countable, so you want "a small number" of them. And, where are they roaming? The house? The farmland? Somewhere else?
- Were the golems silenced by an outside force, as the current phrasing implies, or did they just run out of juice and fall silent on their own?
- It sounds a bit like it's the fire that was demolished and shipped, since that's the subject of the first clause of that sentence. It could benefit from rephrasing to put the house in that role.
I think that's everything I noticed. Again, cool idea, and I think it could be very effective with some tweaking.
~Neshomeh
First off, thanks.
The tense changes were mainly to imply what time it was taking place in. The double line spacing between "No more.-" and "Or the bullet" was intentional, to separate it from the rest, and indicate a time shift. It shifts to the present tense, because it's when people are talking about it. Honestly, personal mistake not adding a second space between "get what he deserves" and "Another month".
Re, SPaG:
I used approached for that very reason. We, as the reader, are not supposed to know if the bullet, say, is touching him, or if it's inches away. As a writer, I wanted that uncertainty.
Stray hyphen was intended to give the section preceding it sort of a "reporty" feel. Not super duper official, but still some inkling of it.
The golems might have simply been silenced by burying them. It's hard to hear screeching under 50 ft of dirt. Or maybe they were deactivated by someone. Lost power. Or maybe the small hammers just didn't work. so they had to use bigger ones.
Thanks for the help with the rest of the SPaG; and because I forgot to mention it earlier, partial credit to John Milton (yes, that Milton) for inspiring this writing style.
Just as an example of why I can't make sense of it, you've got two sentences about a transition in time. The first, "Two weeks pass," is present-tense (and the rest of the paragraph is past). The second, "Another month passed," is past-tense. It doesn't seem like you're using consistent tenses for consistent sorts of thoughts, especially when you switch between tenses in the same paragraph, which happens a couple more times, in the two golem paragraphs.
And then, you addressed the instance of double whitespace between paragraphs four and five, but not the several instances of no whitespace, such as between paragraphs two and three. There should be one line of whitespace between paragraphs for standard Internet formatting.
I think perhaps it would be clearer to write the main narrative in Roman type and past-tense, with "official reporty" present-tense bits set off in italics, people's gossip in quotation marks, and standard paragraphing throughout. Right now, even with the explanation, I'm still not sure which bits are supposed to be report, narrative, people talking, or what. {= (
~Neshomeh
... I'll try making this about something other than PPC.
Amelia wandered reluctantly into the library. Clara was, of course, already waiting in her usual spot, with books all around and currently buried deep in an ancient volume entitled “History of the Divisions, Volume One – 100BC – 500AD”.
“Hello,” said Amelia, and Clara glanced up.
She put the book down and motioned to Amelia to sit down beside her, before pulling out a piece of paper covered in her tiny handwriting.
Amelia groaned and looked closely at it, trying to decipher her friend’s spidery scrawl. “What is this thing?” she asked.
“A study plan – look, I’ve worked out when you’re going to do what – you can see it later.”
Amelia rolled her eyes. “Look, Clara, I asked for some help with revision, not a whole study plan for the next… how long?”
“Six months. That’s how long until the exam.”
Amelia nodded.
“Anyway. Shall we get going?” Clara asked, picking up one of the textbooks (“The Theory of Magic”) and opening it.
Amelia moved a little closer and peered over Clara’s shoulder. She tried to focus, but the textbook wasn’t very engaging and she couldn’t stop thinking about what Nathan had said.
Clara turned a page and asked, “What was on that last page?”
“Um…” Amelia groaned inwardly.
“You’re distracted, aren’t you? What is it?”
“Oh… um… nothing….” Amelia knew there was no way Clara would believe that, and the red flush on her cheeks didn’t help.
“It’s Nathan, isn’t it?”
Amelia sighed and said “Maybe…”
Clara smiled triumphantly and began chanting “Amelia and Nathan, sitting in a tree…”
Amelia groaned.
but that was an interesting scene and I think I'd like to read more.
- Tomash
I kid, I kid. ;)
That said, this was adorably light. Best of luck to Amelia on her exams!
... Even if she has to start studying that far in advance. She has my sympathies. |D
I admit to being a little lost as to who these two are/what they look like, but they play off each other wonderfully.
The context was rather unclear but I’ll probably be using these characters for some more prompts.
Amelia doesn’t really have to start studying quite that early - Clara’s probably been hassling her for weeks!
I’m not quite sure what Amelia looks like, but I know Clara’s small with blonde hair and glasses.
They’re... well, schoolgirls, for lack of a better term. They’re studying magic and the exams are probably the equivalent of GSCEs.
Hope that makes it a bit clearer!
The two women were curled up in bed together, blankets drawn up over bare skin to keep away the chill. Charlotte draped an arm over Ix's waist, grinning.
"So your full name is—?"
"Yes," Ix said, looking rather shamefaced.
"I mean, I knew Potterverse werewolves' names were a little on the nose, but—"
Ix rolled over, grumbling when Charlotte's arms tightened, pulling her closer. "You don't have to take the mickey out of it."
Charlotte rested her chin on Ix's shoulder, grinning. "I'm not teasing, I just think it's hilarious, that's all. Faolan Amaris—'little wolf moon'? Your old author really had it in for you."
"Weren't you named after a spider who wrote messages for a pig?" Ix said, glancing over her shoulder at Charlotte.
Charlotte stuck her tongue out at her. "Hey, it could be worse," she said. "Lupin's dad's name also meant wolf, and his mom's maiden name was Howell, so..." She trailed off when she noticed Ix's grimace. "What?"
"My middle name, Amaris, was my ma's given name," Ix said. "My da's name was Connell... which also means wolf."
Charlotte stared at her for a minute before letting go, guffawing loudly. "I'm sorry, I'm sorry, I shouldn't be laughing, but—"
Ix waved a hand, smiling wryly. "Wolf and Moon had a werewolf kid. It's alright, I'd be laughing, too."
I think this this a good job of describing how people are moving throughout the scene, and for a dialogue-heavy piece the lack of a setting is helpful for letting people focus on the important bits (the conversation and the snuggle session), I think.
- Tomash
Some gentle teasing going on here! And it's always good when Ix is able to laugh at herself. Character development between these two!
So this is...kind of non-PPC writing. Think of it as...backstory of sorts...for an AU version of a PPC agent and some other people??
Alright. Basically: Doctor Who and Torchwood Hogwarts AU, wherein Torchwood characters through season 2 and Doctor Who characters through New Who's season 4 exist in the Potterverse--in the 1970s. The Harry Potter characters remain in place. Where does the PPC agent come in? Well, instead of Jack Harkness, we have Jacques Bonnefoy. And yes, there is a difference. Also, here he was born in France and sounds it, though he put a lot of effort into a British accent during school and uses that frequently as well.
Around 1975 or 1976, Jacques Bonnefoy (French Hogwarts student, graduated two years back) and his best friend Ianto Jones (Welsh Hogwarts student, graduated one year back) stumbled into the PPC (present day). They became agents in different departments, with the idea that they would stay for a time and then go back to figure out some way to help once the war with Voldemort heated up further, which it seemed it was going to. Several years later, that's what they did: they went back, rented a flat together, and joined their friends in trying to help (though not within the Order of the Phoenix itself).
It's not the best atmosphere to be living in, for the obvious reason that there's a war on.
A key:
Jon (Jonathan) Smith: the Ninth Doctor. Of an age with Jacques.
Johnny (John) Smith: the Tenth Doctor. Two years older than Jon.
(it's a family name!)
Rose Tyler and Ianto Jones--same names as usual, even if their backstories are a bit different.
"And you haven't seen him?" Rose was frowning. "I don't like this."
"Maybe he's just...out." Jon's voice was light, but the crease between his eyebrows betrayed him. "You know how he is--always liked his nights out--"
Ianto shook his head. "He was meant to be coming straight back. To the Muggle shops, to Diagon, and back. That's it." He stared down at his hands: useless. Completely useless. "I should've been with him."
Rose shook her head immediately, reaching out to take his hand. "You couldn't have known."
"There's a war on," Ianto said. He pulled his hands away and stood, trying to resist the urge to pace. He ended up moving haltingly toward the kitchen and then turning back. "I shouldn't have let him go alone."
It had seemed so easy, yesterday. Jacques had been grinning, teasing him as he checked his pockets. He'd at least seemed relaxed, switching in and out of French and daring Ianto to keep up until the younger wizard rolled his eyes and started speaking in Welsh--which he could do far too quickly for Jacques' limited knowledge of the language to work.
"Going to miss me?" Jacques had asked, just before he left. He'd sidled up close, eyes dancing.
Ianto had rolled his eyes. "Not a bit."
Jacques gasped. "So cruel! You know I think the world of you, mon ami--mon cher ami, mon--"
Ianto shoved him, grinning. "Just go to the shops already, you prat." He'd marched Jacques to the door with a hand on his shoulder; there, the grin faded. "Come back in one piece."
For a second--just one second--Jacques' fingers had brushed his cheek. "For you--I will."
He'd been out the door before Ianto could catch his breath long enough to roll his eyes, jogging down the stairs with a cheery wave and a grin.
And then he hadn't come back. No word, no sign--nothing. He was just gone. Ianto had already checked for him in several places, had even sent an urgent letter to his parents in case for some reason he'd got it into his head to go to France. Nothing had worked.
Sending a note to Rose and Jon had seemed like a good idea at the time. He'd been pretty sure they were around, for a change--both were working for the Order of the Phoenix, had tried to get him and Jacques to join as well--and, well, if Jacques wasn't with them, then...they might have a better sense of where he could be.
"I really don't like this," Rose said quietly. She looked up at Jon, nervously twisting the thin gold ring on her left hand; he looked back more seriously now, his ringless hands shoved deep into his pockets. "We're gonna look for him, right?"
Jon nodded. "'Course. Can't just let him vanish." His eyes flicked to Ianto. "We'll get him back."
"Yeah," Ianto said. He took a breath. "I'm coming with you. I should have--"
"No." Jon stepped forward, shaking his head. "Keep looking, but stay safe."
"He's my best friend. If you think I'm going to--"
"Have you ever done anything like this before?" Jon demanded. "I bet you haven't. Rose and I'll go. We're a good team. We'll find him, and we'll drag him out of whatever mess he's landed in. But you're going to be smart, and stay based right here, so there's someone to back him up if he gets out on his own and comes back with company."
"Or injured, you mean." Had the walls here always been so, so shabby? He'd thought it was a nice enough place, or at least bearable, but right now it just looked dull and pointless. They should have found something better, maybe in a different city--maybe then Jacques wouldn't have-- "You want me out the way and here in case by some miracle he--"
"I want you staying safe," Jon said sharply. He ran a hand over his hair, a habit he'd picked up from Jacques, who'd picked it up from someone else in turn--Hart, possibly, and wasn't that an unsettling thought. Whatever the two of them had been throughout school, it wasn't friends. "Can I be frank?"
Ianto jerked his head. "Can't stop you."
Jon met his eyes. His gaze was the sort of intense that almost made sense of how strongly Jacques had been drawn to him in fifth year--almost. Ianto could never completely see the appeal, even if he respected what he did--and, worse, what he was in another universe. "If he comes back to find you've got yourself killed, he'll go spare."
"If he comes back and got himself killed, I'll go spare," Ianto retorted.
Jon grinned; Ianto narrowed his eyes. "You're a right pair, you are. Look, me'n Rose--we'll get him back. Whatever condition he's in when we find him, we'll get him back. You stay here. Keep writing to people, keep checking places he might've gone in the Muggle world--"
"Couldn't Rose--?"
"I'll be busy," Rose said. She motioned to Jon. "Someone's got to keep him talkin' sense."
Ianto ran a hand through his hair, wishing for at least the twentieth time that he hadn't picked up the habit himself. "Right." Send the pureblood around to make house calls in the Muggle world--or, worse, telephone calls. No way for that to go poorly. "If you're not back in two days--"
Jon shook his head. "Give us a week."
"A week?"
"A week," Jon said firmly. "Hope we won't need it. A full week before you do something stupid, though."
Ianto crossed his arms, realizing too late he'd picked that up from Jacques as well. Was there anything in his life that hadn't been influenced by him by now? They'd only even been proper friends since Ianto's fifth year...which was admittedly quite a while ago, now. "I never do anything stupid."
Jon snorted. "Nice try, mate--knew you in school." He clapped Ianto on the shoulder and then looked over at Rose. "We should go! Get our things in order, figure out a place to start--"
"Yeah," Rose said. She came over to kiss Ianto's cheek. "Be safe, yeah? We'll bring him back."
Ianto nodded. "Maybe the pair of you should become Aurors, when the war's over."
Rose grinned. "Nah--when the war's done, I'm taking Johnny and moving as far away as I can get. Not like he won't have found somewhere interesting by now, all the traveling he's been doing..."
"Best be off," Jon said. He was already moving for the door; Ianto had the impression that he couldn't wait any longer to start looking, and was suddenly, fiercely glad of it. "Rose--"
"Yeah." She joined him, and smiled gently at Ianto as Jon opened the door. "We will find him."
Ianto nodded. "I'm sure you will. Take care."
For the curious, a (brief, incomplete) Hogwarts House key:
Gryffindor:
Gwen Cooper (a year below the Marauders)
Jacques Bonnefoy (three years above the Marauders)
Rose Tyler (half a year younger than Jacques by my notes)
Possibly Kevin (Jacques' year, still needs a surname--this is the translation of Jack's childhood friend who he...talked into joining a war with him and got, in short, killed. In this universe, he was killed by Death Eaters in the year before Jacques and Ianto joined the PPC).
Martha Jones (a year above Jacques)
Donna Noble (same year)
Hufflepuff:
Ianto Jones (a year below Jacques)
No one else from DW/TW, apparently. Weird.
Ravenclaw:
Owen Harper (Ianto's year)
Toshiko Sato (I have yet to figure out what year)
Johnny Smith (aka Ten, two years above Jacques)
Slytherin:
John Hart (tell me you're surprised. Look me in the eyes and tell me this is a surprise to you. I'll wait.)
Jon Smith (aka Nine. Went there primarily because he asked out of curiosity, and regretted it as Voldemort rose higher and the blood politics really got going. In fifth year, he loudly insulted his housemates over it in the Great Hall, and ended up with detention--and, after serving detention with Jacques (who definitely didn't get detention for this exact purpose), a new friend.)
Also: Suzie Costello is around somewhere, possibly not at Hogwarts at all, John Hart--well, we'll leave him for another time, and of course the Master's around--his name is Harry Saxon (though he'd really rather people called him Harold), and he's Johnny's sworn academic rival. They have quite a bit of fun, even if they disagree a bit when it comes to morals. In research.
Also also: where's everyone from Classic Who? They're around! Never fear. They're just a bit older! The Smith family is incredibly full of them, though they're definitely not all brothers. Presumably, all the companions are around as well. I do have a tentative description of how the Smiths are all related, but apart from that, I'll just leave you with the tidbit that the Three and Delgado Master equivalents are old friends of the inexhaustibly bantering type. That Master is quite likely Saxon's uncle (or father?) and Johnny and Harry probably met a few times growing up.
(Also also also: why, yes, this universe's Ten and Rose have gotten married. Yes, this is, in some ways, a happy AU. Yes, in other ways it might possibly be worse than canon. And yes, I did have a lot of fun creating this!)
~Z
It was Franklin who made the call.
"Ianto," he said when the younger wizard picked up. "Good. Faster than an owl, this."
"Sir?" Ianto had been preparing to leave, had just been going to get a last healing potion, but a call from this man...
"Jacques is in St. Mungo's," Franklin said.
Ianto sat on the sofa's arm with a thud. "He--"
"They don't know yet," Jacques' father said. Now Ianto understood the rough quality to his voice. He'd been thinking vaguely of phone quality before, wondering if cellphones could really be any better. "His--your--other friends, Jon, Rose--they're in with him."
Ianto dropped the phone. He sat frozen for a moment before he managed to get off the sofa and pick the receiver back up. "I--" His voice was barely audible.
"How soon can you get here?"
"Minutes," Ianto said blankly. "I was--going already. To check--" To check down at Jacques' favorite Muggle club. One last time, before he accepted that the week was up and he was going to chase his friends into Death Eater territory.
To accept that he was probably going to try to contact John Hart.
"Fourth floor," Franklin said. Ianto finally noticed how much thicker his accent was than normal: an old oddity, Scottish-tinged words to his wife and sons' French. Odder, really, was his surname, taken to match his wife's-- "Be careful on the way."
"Yes, sir."
Franklin hung up. It was a testament to the situation, probably, that he hadn't repeated his habitual insistence that Ianto could always use his given name now he was nearly five years out of school.
Ianto allowed himself half a minute to sit and feel his hands shaking. Then he got up, gathered his things and some of Jacques', and forced as much calm into his body as he could before he Apparated to the alley closest to St. Mungo's.
Try as he might, however, he could do nothing to calm his mind.
--
Yes, there will be more! But this seemed like a, ahem, fun place to cut it. I never get to do cliffhangers anymore.
Jack's father was also named Franklin; his mother's never named, though we see her briefly. In this AU, both of them are alive, and the mother is named Amélie. That he's Scottish is both to explain the name and in slight reference to Jack's actor, John Barrowman, actually being Scottish for all he uses the American accent in most of his performing roles. Jacques having developed a British accent while at Hogwarts is also partly in reference to Barrowman's American accent, though it was partly just a survival tactic.
Also, have some dates! This is set in late 1979 or early 1980, which means that the war is about two years away from ending. Jacques graduated in 1974, Ianto in 1975; around 1976 they ended up in the PPC, where they spent one to two years. This places them back in their version of the Potterverse around 1978 (or possibly late 1977).
~Z
The fourth floor of St. Mungo's Hospital for Magical Maladies and Injuries was for spell damage. First was creature injuries, fifth held a tearoom and shop that Ianto had no intention of visiting. Third--ground, second, and third didn't matter, but the information catalogued its way into Ianto's mind anyway: artifact incidents on the ground floor, magical bugs on the second, potion and plant poisoning on the third.
Jacques was paler than Ianto had ever seen him, almost paler than the crisp hospital bedding he was lying on. His eyes were closed. He was breathing, just unevenly enough to be noticeable; when he'd been brought in--when someone had left him in the lobby--he'd been unconscious and had bruises on his back. The rest of the damage had been invisible.
He hadn't woken up. Nearly a day, and he hadn't woken up.
Ianto had hardly ever seen Grey before, and he barely saw him now. Jacques' younger brother spent most of his time in the tearoom that Ianto was avoiding; when he did show up, after Ianto had sat helplessly for an hour, he stood looking at Jacques for ten minutes, looking nearly as pale, and then left again.
Franklin was there, though, and Amélie; Amélie even hugged him, clinging for long moments before she smoothed his hair and let him go. It was Franklin who caught him up in short, pained sentences, who told him that the Healers seemed worried that Jacques wasn't waking up, who pointed him to Rose, lying pale and still and scratched just below her neck nearby. Who explained that the scratches were from some sort of animal, but the Healers had been far more concerned with the spell damage, and had given her sleeping potions so that she could heal faster.
Because Rose was expected to heal, and soon. She was young, and healthy, and looked worse off than she was. She would be fine.
Ianto sat with her anyway, when he felt he'd start screaming at Jacques to move if he looked at his friend any longer. Her breathing was smooth, even; pale and still as she was, he could believe she would bounce back.
Jacques was still motionless in an hour, and in another hour, and another. The sad little bag of Jacques' belongings that Ianto had brought sat nearby, out of the way. It seemed now incredibly, stupidly optimistic that he'd believed Jacques might be in any condition to appreciate the thought, much less actually use anything he'd packed. Stupid, idiotic--
Medical. What if Medical could heal him? What if Medical could heal him where St. Mungo's couldn't, and sitting here waiting was going to--
But if Jacques was supposed to die--well, Ianto wouldn't let him, and that was that. But if the author of their AU decided to kill him off--
No. No, they couldn't. That couldn't happen. No. Because--because they were an AU, and Jack Harkness was immortal. He'd found so many parallels when he made his way through the story: Jon, Johnny, and Rose, Martha's interest in healing, Johnny's traveling, hell, even the rivalry between Johnny and young Harold Saxon. The Doctors were all relatives, Owen Harper in Ravenclaw was dating someone named Katie, Jacques had even dated a girl called Lucia--surely, with details that small in place, the author wouldn't write in Jacques' death? It wouldn't make sense. The change would be too large.
Franklin shifted in the chair next to him, sending Ianto's thoughts back into turmoil. Franklin was alive; that was already a change. But Jacques was also French, not from a nonexistent colony planet, so--
Round and round. He had to--
Jacques was unchanged. Grey was back, sending desperately awkward glances at Ianto as his mother hugged him. Ianto decided it was time to go see Jon.
"First floor," Franklin had told him earlier. He'd added that it didn't look good, but Jacques...Ianto hadn't been able to shake the hope that he would wake up any minute, the fear that it would happen the second he stepped away.
Now he took the risk, walking out the door and taking the lift down. It took nearly ten guilty minutes to find Jon, which he finally managed after catching a Healer who was willing to spare a minute to talk.
He wished he hadn't. He really did. He'd never seen anyone injured like this, outside of that one awful badfic he refused to think about, and he'd never wanted to, either.
Jon wasn't the familiar shade of pale he'd seen on Jacques and Rose: he was chalk white. Every big of visible skin was broken, deep slashes that made Rose's scratches look like they hadn't broken the skin. There was--there was a bite mark at his neck. Ianto thought wildly of sparklepires when he realized it looked human--but no, this wasn't that kind of crossover. He knew it wasn't.
The bite at Jon's neck was uncovered, angry and red but not bleeding; the healer who gave him a very quick run-down of Jon's injuries mentioned a second one under the bandage on his arm, and slashes...slashes everywhere.
Ianto swallowed again and again after the Healer left. Finally, he went into the next room and threw up.
When he came back, Jon was unchanged. Ianto dragged over a chair and sat, forcing himself to look at the other wizard. He felt ill, still--but what was that compared to this?
What had even done this? The Healer seemed to have assumed he knew what had happened, if not the specific injuries, which left him to play detective at just about the last time he'd ever want to. Slashes, so deep--human bite marks, of all things--and the Healers couldn't just close it all up, said his chances were bad--
He froze as it came to him, staring down at Jon's limp hand against the blanket. No. No.
He got to his feet, feeling like he was floating. Tucked the blankets in around Jon, made for the door, went back up to the fourth floor. Jacques was unchanged; Rose was still asleep. He told the Bonnefoys that he had somewhere to be, but would be back, tomorrow if not tonight; they wished him well, thanked him for coming at all--and then he was back in the lift, out in the street, ducking into the alley, Apparating home. Closing the blinds, taking out the remote activator--
His hands didn't shake as they punched in coordinates. He hesitated a moment before stepping through the bright blue portal--what if--?
He had to know. He had to try...and he couldn't do that from home.
He stepped through. The portal closed behind him.
--
((More to come! ~Z))
I want to hug them. .-.
Will any of the three wake up?
(Also: "Every big of visible skin"?)
Though the Healers are expecting Rose to bounce back--she's asleep because of potions right now. So presumably she'll wake up once they wear off and she's rested long enough.
(Bah. Every bit. Thanks.)
Also, they could use many, many hugs. That's for sure.
For the rest--wait and see!
~Z
Now I'm theorizing what on earth could have possibly hurt them. Is it bad my first thought was Weevils? Because my first thought was Weevils.
Hope you write a new part soon!
I mean, it's not bad...but remember, this is a Hogwarts AU, not a straight crossover. So no TARDISes, no aliens, no giant leaps of time travel (only Time Turners available)...which means Weevils are pretty unlikely at this point.
No clue when the next part will come, but it will show up!
~Z
Also: ALL THE EMOTIONS.
At least they found Jacques...?
Fantastic. That's what I'm going for! Well, among other things, but this is very much going for an emotional response.
They've found him! No one's in such good shape, apparently, but...he's alive! And in safe hands!
Now we just need to get in to see him, and find out what even happened to begin with...
~Z
Bother that. Broke the HTML by accident :/ I must have forgotten to check it again after adding the notes at the end. Sorry!
~Z
My brain's not putting up any coherent thoughts on characterization, so I'll leave that to someone else who wants to review, but I think this was overall a well-written piece that did a good job of conveying people's emotional states (especially Ianto's urge to go out and do something and/or go on a roaring rampage of revenge).
- Tomash
This was intended to be pretty much all about emotional states, so this is a good comment to get :)
Sequel incoming, probably soonish. There's definitely more to be told here.
~Z
The theme of Ianto and Jon picking up traits from each other was sweet - and Rose is Rose, even when she's an AU! ... Imagine Rose in the PPC, though.
Glad you think so.
I just love that at the root of it all is Hart--John Hart. In Torchwood, he's Jack's Time Agent ex-partner; here, he's the Slytherin boy who took exception to Jacques probably as early as the train to Hogwarts, and kept up a banter-filled rivalry of the sort where they literally fought each other for all seven years, each fancied the other at some point, and had some weird kind of trust between them that most people weren't really aware of because it was mostly shown in moments hidden here and there.
And that's the guy who Ianto thinks passed the trait on to Jacques, who passed it on to his own friends in turn. Can't be the most pleasant feeling in the world, that.
And hurray, Rose feels like Rose! They're all meant to (feel like themselves, that is), in a way--the idea is really just 'okay, translate everyone into the Potterverse in the seventies.' So, you know, Gwen Cooper spent a whole lot of years trying (and failing) to rein in the Marauders, which is a bit of a callback both to her personality in general and to her time on the police force. On the show, she also has a boyfriend named Rhys. He doesn't know what Torchwood does--he thinks she works for special ops. Here, he's a Muggle; she meets him over the summer holidays in her last few years at Hogwarts, and falls for him. Things like that--believe me, I can go on, and on, and on...and that's how I got such a developed AU to begin with. I just kept on thinking of how to carry things over.
As to Rose in the PPC...well, I can't so much see her deciding to stay, but I can see her visiting. To the point where I now have in my head the first couple lines of a scene for it. So that might happen at some point.
In the meantime, as I mentioned above, expect a little sequel to the scene pretty soon. I had the first couple lines come into my head this morning, and ended up writing out two notebook pages' worth of it soon after. Now I just need to type it up and finish it...
~Z
It's sort of what happened to my own little ficlet, there - though it's a product of the process, and definitely far-removed from the timeline's starting point.
That sounds like the sort of inter-House interaction we need more of, tbh.
... Rose meeting the Sunflower Official. Can you imagine?
Jacques had himself a nice bit of inter-House interaction, not only with Hart. Hart wasn't even the only Slytherin--there's Jon.
And, of course, Ianto's a Hufflepuff one year younger. That was an interesting build.
In short: I'm starting with the partially written scene. After that might be Rose visiting the PPC. After that, well, we'll see what happens!
~Z
Ce’rana of Borune smiled slightly as she finished drying her face, hanging the washcloth back on its little ring. It always was nice to be clean again, even if it was only some parts of her.
This time, however, she did not immediately turn and exit the bathroom. She took a moment to turn to the set of hanging shelves next to the sink; something towards the back had been bothering her in its nonidentifiability since she’d noticed it. Given the lack of dust, it was obviously either new or frequently-used, and she really saw no harm in keeping up with the various things her partner used.
Her eyebrows raised slowly when she picked up the black tube and read the label. Wordlessly, she stepped out of the bathroom and walked over to Alex’s half of the RC, extending it to him when she reached him. “Alex? May I ask what this is?”
He glanced at the tube for an instant, then paled slightly and looked back at the book he was reading. “Never seen it before in my life.”
Ce’rana blinked. Now that was an unusual reaction. “Are you certain? Because whatever this is, it is certainly not mine, and if it is also not yours then someone else must have been in our bathroom very recently.”
“That could be it, you know.” He shrugged, quickly turning his attention to his book in the vain hope that she would drop the subject.
The Dryad thought for a moment. He obviously recognized it, and just as obviously didn’t think that she knew exactly what the term ‘Hair Dye’ meant. She leaned down slightly and smiled, raising the tube slightly so she could compare it to his hair without him necessarily noticing. “Alex, are you entirely certain this is not yours?” she asked sweetly.
“I’m positive it’s not mine.” He didn’t look up, hoping that if he ignored the tube long enough, it would go away.
The tiny agent straightened again. “In that case, I will be holding onto it to ensure that it is not lost before it can be returned to its owner.” She bit her tongue for a moment to avoid spoiling her game. “I trust this will not be an issue?”
“You could just put it back… please?” He glanced up at her again, still hoping that she would drop the subject.
Ce’rana blinked. That wasn’t his usual tone for when she was bothering him about something. “Is it something expensive, then? I would think it would be better to keep it somewhere safe in a case like that,” she said a moment later, struggling to keep up her ruse of cluelessness.
“If you put it back, then whoever owns that will know where it is.” He was running out of excuses.
“Yes, but it might fall and be lost, given where it was.” The Dryad had to bite her tongue again to keep from just saying what came to mind next. “And if this individual will be continuing to leave things around, perhaps we ought to speak with one another and set aside a space to be leaving said things so they do not get mixed in with ours, as this did.”
“Rana… just put it back.” He really wanted to stop this conversation before it got worse. “I’m sure that it would be fine where it was.”
Ce’rana couldn’t keep her smile from growing wider. “I will if you tell me why this color matches the majority of your hair so well, Alex,” she said innocently.
His book closed. “I have no idea what you’re talking about.”
She leaned down again and tapped his nose with the tube. “I may have never personally touched it, but many of the ladies at court were perfectly willing to change the color of their hair to match some fashion or another. As a result, I do know what the term ‘hair dye’ means, and even if I did not, I do know what dye is. The shade of black indicated by this container matches your hair almost perfectly - likely a minute difference between this and the dye itself. So, I repeat my question: why is it that this matches your own hair so well, Alex?”
“It doesn’t match my hair, see? I’ve got a brown streak.” He grabbed the offending streak of hair and held it out to show her.
Ce’rana raised her eyebrow at him. “Historically speaking, one of the more common fashions to recur was to have most of a woman’s hair be black, but have a single white streak left in it. Your argument proves nothing to me.”
“I don’t know what you’re talking about.”
“It would be entirely plausible for you to dye every bit of your hair save for one streak, or to dye just that streak. However, seeing as I know you hate that streak, my closest guess would be that you have been attempting to cover it with dye.”
“I have absolutely no idea what you’re talking about.” He sounded less like he didn’t know, and more like he was just wishing she would buy it.
She tapped him with the tube again. “None whatsoever? Assuming I would believe this, whom is it that would have left this on our shelves among your things?”
“I will literally pay you to stop talking about this.” He pulled out a bar of chocolate.
Ce’rana immediately dropped the tube into his lap, took the chocolate, and walked back to her side of the room. No Tolnedran could resist the allure of the word ‘pay’, and no Dryad would resist so much chocolate for something so simple.
Alex gave a small sigh of relief, then picked up the tube and took it back to the bathroom. Ce’rana heard the sound of a sink turning on and chuckled to herself as she broke one of the little pieces off the bar. Even if she hadn’t gotten him to admit it, she’d still gotten all the answers she’d wanted and more.
However, I'm confused about how what's presumably a bottle labeled "hair day" (or at least that's the impression of it I got) isn't that unidentifiable, unless it's an unlabeled colored bottle (which seems like a rather silly idea)
- Tomash
Ce'rana doesn't get a lot of opportunities to mess with Alex, and she wants to make the most of this one. If that means pretending to be clueless for ten minutes, she can do that.
She always knew exactly what that was. She also knows that Alex is A Little Vain about his little streak of color. The obvious solution here is to tease him.
I missed the part where she read the label. Before I noticed that, I'd thought the narration had her as actually confused about what the hair dye was.
Poor Alex - hair dye is not something to be ashamed of! At least Ce'rana gets some chocolate for her sleuthing, though.
I appreciate their distinct voices, as well~
Daily Life Over at The Wake
As part of one of the few routines he had been able to grasp in the past three months, Bobo found himself just outside of the Southern District's humble Welcome House, staring into the mid-distance, waiting. The sky was calm, the trees and grasses hummed softly with Life... and Nita had no idea he was here.
Well, in the bigger scheme of things, she knew he was here, in the City of Change, and he knew that she knew, and in some small way that put him at ease. Nita had become a constant - or, from another point of view, had become a constant again - and to a potentially-disquieting extent he was loathe to change that-
"'Stihó!", came the greeting, and the other, newer constant, came into view. Only months' worth of practice allowed the Umbreon-embodied peridexis to suppress his groan.
/Dai, Nautilus,/ he returned, breaking off his attempt at meditation to properly greet the embodied Aeon-slash-City.
/A Vaporeon, again? Haven't you grown tired of that form?/
Nautilus - for he had taken on the shape of a Vaporeon this time, possibly so they'd be more equal in height, merely shook his head and grinned.
"Like how you would ever tire of getting to spend time with Nita?"
That line drove Bobo to fix the other with a Look.
/You're here to train me, not tease me,/ he strained, walking over to Nautilus' side stiffly.
"And I'm not free to do both?" Without prompting, Nautilus reached out and lightly pawed one of Bobo's ears; a quick bout of reflexes brought them out of the "Vaporeon"'s physical reach.
/There's more than one kind of freedom- and our time here is limited, whether you like it or not. What style are we in today?/ he asked, in a rush to change the subject, because time was limited whether he liked it or not as well.
Not because he'd mentioned Nita. Not at all.
"Well, I was going to make it card dueling, again, but-" Nautilus jumped in the air, and didn't quite make it all the way back to the ground.
"Race you to the clouds?"
Bobo smirked. /I know you like being flashy, but I'll admit this sounds novel. You're on./
Not wanting to waste time, he focused on his own set of invisible stairs, and pounced.
Obviously I recognise Bobo, and while I don't know that I agree with your characterisation, I can at least accept it for the story - but I have no idea who Nautilus is, or where they are. Other comments suggest 'on the internet'?
...
... y'know what, I'm just going to assume he's Marisa's manual-program, at least until you tell me different.
hS
... That'd be fantastic. XD
Not sure where this is set or who Nautilus it, but it overall makes sense.
Also, pokemon!Bobo is an interesting image.
I've not read too far into the series, so I don't know if Bobo is an OC or a canon character. Either way, this was a nice little snapshot into his life.
And technically, he *is* a canon character - but not one you've met yet. ;)
The structure of The Wake is why he's an Umbreon and not his normal self, to keep it short. Nautilus is an NPC from that Dreamwidth comm.
Thanks! I'm glad I was able to convey enough of a picture. ^^
... that this snippet was going to come out. =P
Fanfic, Original Fic, things that relate to the PPC or not. This isn't a PPC specific prompt, in fact I'm trying my hardest to make sure that none of them are. This is about getting people to write about things that they want to write about, hell if you want to use it as a springboard for one of the elevator pitches further down the page, go ahead by all means.
In fact, if you ask me there's maybe too much PPC stuff going on in these prompt replies, seeing more diversity is really welcomed and refreshing.
Novastorme
(Though, if this keeps up, I might actually start claiming Nautilus as my own... and there's trouble down that route.)