Subject: D'oh
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Posted on: 2018-05-02 23:42:00 UTC

Yeah, that whole paragraph is really clunky, and looking back that is a blatant fragment... I fixed it up like so:


But he did take his canon studies seriously. Almost as seriously as Thoth did. And so in those rare times when their schedules aligned, the two partners might be found alongside one another, lost in books. Over time, an informal rule had developed that speaking was only permitted should one of them have questions regarding their studies, typically Thoth inquiring to Tom about “ancient” earth culture, or Tom asking for clarification on 40k minutiae.

As Tom was just about to.


I think that's a bit better. Hopefully it's not a run-on now, but I'm pretty sure I managed to avoid that.

Anycase, I am really glad that you enjoyed it, because I was, of course, a bit worried about that (who wouldn't be?).

Oh, and do read the mission when you have time. I can't provide any unbiased perspective on it, but if you have half as much fun reading it as I did writing it then it should be good. Besides, it features Warsheep. Warsheep, Brotherhood, and silly dramatic entrances.

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