Subject: Very well done
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Posted on: 2017-12-18 15:59:00 UTC

Not attributing any of the dialogue and leaving me to figure out who the heck these people were was a good storytelling technique. It wasn't overly confusing, and you'd left enough hints in there to allow me to figure out it was (hopefully this pads the spoilers) the Notary and Lola before you revealed that.

Those clues, of course, required familiarity with your spinoff. I can't speak to how readable this is to someone who hasn't read your stuff before, so I'd suggest finding such a person if you want a review from that perspective.

Poor Notary. (Oh my word you're getting me to say such things, congrats, but I think I have some context for this.)

If a reunion ever happens (of if this is post any such reunion), it'll be rather intense, it seems.

- Tomash

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