Subject: Some notes about paragraphs
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Posted on: 2012-10-03 23:29:00 UTC

To be frank, I'm gonna have trouble reading this one without more of them. Everything is very smooshed together, and since my vision options at the moment are "no glasses and terrible eyesight" or "old glasses and lots of scratches and smudges," it's a hard prospect. ^_^;

Your options are:

1. Double line-break for each new paragraph (preferred online)

OR

2. Indenting the first line of each new paragraph (typical for print).

Right now you have no indents and only single line-breaks for most paragraphs, with the odd double line-break thrown in with no pattern I can discern, except the ones around badfic quotes. This is hard to read.

Also, every time someone new has an action, they get a new paragraph. I recently learned this goes for all actions, not just speech. You're kinda forced to pay more attention to which things happen in what order this way, leading to a clearer visual for the reader, and there's less confusion for readers trying to sort out what name belongs to what action/speech. It's hard to get used to doing if you aren't, but I've been working on it, and I think it's really made a positive difference for me. I recommend it.

I do look forward to the planet-shattering kabooms eventually, though. *g*

~Neshomeh

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