Subject: Examples!
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Posted on: 2012-10-04 18:52:00 UTC

First - yes to your PS. You have a sensible reason for grouping things the way you do, so that's fine by me.

Second - just to be persnickety, your first example would actually run like this:

"No you're-" Phoebe bit down on the instinctive denial. "What happened?" she asked instead. "Who hit me? And why, I ask in all honesty, am I lying on a suitcase?"

The 'suitcase' in question bucked suddenly underneath her.

She tipped onto the stone flags of the corridor. "Oh," Phoebe managed to wheeze. "Sorry, Traveller. But really, what's going on?"


Personally, I dislike the look of long, single lines that stretch all the way across the screen a lot more than short ones. Especially a bunch of similar length in a row. Like this post. Very... line-y.

~Neshomeh

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