Subject: My two cents
Posted on: 2022-07-10 15:40:31 UTC

These are definitely badfic. The prose is some of the most beige I've ever seen, there are few commas or periods, and there is no characterization whatsoever. Overall, the series seems boring, which works especially poorly for smutfic. This is just me, but I don't see much humor potential here; beige prose and bad SPaG are annoying, but I don't know how to make them funny in a mission context. I think most of the jokes would have to come from Agent interactions rather than from the fic itself.

The problems I see are more structural than anything. None of the fics I read established who Marcella was; she's just There. On the smut side, I have to wonder what exactly the point of making Marcella a hermaphrodite is. The description doesn't mention that much. You could replace her with a cis man with long hair and only a couple of sentences would need changing. What's the point of kink if the kink isn't described?

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