I can't say I've heard of "all" being a word to avoid before, but thinking how I'd write the sentence differently, perhaps you can be more descriptive with it. Replace "all his lovely potions" with "every glittering vial and philter" or some such.
IMO, the issue you'd really be fixing isn't with "all," but with "lovely." (I HAVE heard that adverbs are often not your friends.) What's lovely about the potions? Tell us that instead.
But that's just my take on it. {= )
~Neshomeh
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Ooh, interesting question. by
on 2018-06-25 21:56:00 UTC
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The vague 'All' by
on 2018-06-25 21:18:00 UTC
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All is listed as a vague word on the editing assistant I am using. I have a real problem with vague and weasel words in my writing. Is all just generally bad?
Obviously it is more vague to say, "______ watched as she stripped it of all his lovely potions," than to substitute some random number? Wouldn't that change the meaning of the sentence significantly? Random number of potions doesn't have the same implication of having taken 100% of the potions.
Would it be better to just reword it entirely? How would you handle this sort of problem?
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Eh, what the hell. (Not PPC content... >.>) by
on 2018-06-25 21:07:00 UTC
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Daily Life Over at The Wake
As part of one of the few routines he had been able to grasp in the past three months, Bobo found himself just outside of the Southern District's humble Welcome House, staring into the mid-distance, waiting. The sky was calm, the trees and grasses hummed softly with Life... and Nita had no idea he was here.
Well, in the bigger scheme of things, she knew he was here, in the City of Change, and he knew that she knew, and in some small way that put him at ease. Nita had become a constant - or, from another point of view, had become a constant again - and to a potentially-disquieting extent he was loathe to change that-
"'Stihó!", came the greeting, and the other, newer constant, came into view. Only months' worth of practice allowed the Umbreon-embodied peridexis to suppress his groan.
/Dai, Nautilus,/ he returned, breaking off his attempt at meditation to properly greet the embodied Aeon-slash-City.
/A Vaporeon, again? Haven't you grown tired of that form?/
Nautilus - for he had taken on the shape of a Vaporeon this time, possibly so they'd be more equal in height, merely shook his head and grinned.
"Like how you would ever tire of getting to spend time with Nita?"
That line drove Bobo to fix the other with a Look.
/You're here to train me, not tease me,/ he strained, walking over to Nautilus' side stiffly.
"And I'm not free to do both?" Without prompting, Nautilus reached out and lightly pawed one of Bobo's ears; a quick bout of reflexes brought them out of the "Vaporeon"'s physical reach.
/There's more than one kind of freedom- and our time here is limited, whether you like it or not. What style are we in today?/ he asked, in a rush to change the subject, because time was limited whether he liked it or not as well.
Not because he'd mentioned Nita. Not at all.
"Well, I was going to make it card dueling, again, but-" Nautilus jumped in the air, and didn't quite make it all the way back to the ground.
"Race you to the clouds?"
Bobo smirked. /I know you like being flashy, but I'll admit this sounds novel. You're on./
Not wanting to waste time, he focused on his own set of invisible stairs, and pounced.
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Oh, c'mon, NA, that's my schtick. (nm) by
on 2018-06-25 20:50:00 UTC
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Aww! by
on 2018-06-25 20:31:00 UTC
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-Domesticity, immediately followed by a brain-breaking fic. XD
-Mind, now I'm wondering which 'Heaven' Zeb is humming... at least, I think there's more than one song with that name.
-I do appreciate the Aviator both being honest about her boundaries and not snapping at Zeb in the process. They have both learned something! ... I think.
-Aw, but the tuna! Is the Aviator allergic? I can't remember. :( Though that does mean 'bated breath' could double as 'baited' breath!
-Poor Hestia! Bad case of autocorrect, there, perhaps.
-"Both agents fought off a wave of nausea at yet another time skip washed over them" - at should be 'as', maybe? Or washed could be 'washing'.
-Also, poor Zeb. He just keeps digging these holes... might be overdoing it a little, but that might just be this mission.
-I do like how he's picking at the Sue's fashion sense, though! As well as the near-bookend with Zeb in the Response Center.
The Aviator may want to stop by DoSAT or something as well...
Thank you for writing! =D
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This is amazing! by
on 2018-06-25 20:25:00 UTC
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[i]Robin Hood[/i] is one of my favorite Disney films. That intro music is something I can still whistle at mere mention of the movie.
I had never thought about the historical context. How accurately it all fits makes me think about how much more thoroughly people were educated in the past. There's no way it could have fit so neatly without someone involved knowing about the real people.
I would totally read that sequel.
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Re: Catastrophe Theory request by
on 2018-06-25 20:12:00 UTC
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You can use any of mine you'd like. The kids would be pretty grown up by then. In spring of 2010 Helen was 9 months, Hannah 11 years, Kevin was 8 and Kyle 9. Safe to assume Cali and Cadmar had broken up years before your setting since I haven't seen Caddie in a long time. Agent Miah would be in her mid-40's by then. Just make it memorable?
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Someone should rope the Nameless Admin in on this... by
on 2018-06-25 20:12:00 UTC
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(Y'know, just for a lark.)
Email me with your plans! ... Unless you don't want to risk our emails being compromised by Sues, I guess, in which case your paranoia is accepted!
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Hey, thanks for doing all that wiki work. by
on 2018-06-25 19:58:00 UTC
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I've got Laburnum's spin-off backed up on my computer and flash drives, and I'm planning to make copies of kitsune's today and tomorrow. (Extra day off yay!)
—doctorlit, making use of off time when he can
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Definite congrats on the publishing! by
on 2018-06-25 19:18:00 UTC
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The topic's maybe a little too deep for me to feel like I can comment on it, though you wrote the article in a way that I could at least follow it. I do think it's important to examine these changes in online social trends over time, as we (or later generations of users) will eventually be discussing internet history the same way humans discuss, um . . . other history.
Your discussion on shorter pieces of fan discussion being treated with equal dignity to larger works actually reminds me of one of the themes of Fahrenheit 451: that one of the factors that led to that setting's disillusionment with literature was the loss of free time, which led to less introspection, and less time to consume larger sources of media.
"'Classics cut to fit fifteen-minute radio shows, then cut again to fill a two-minute book column, winding up at last as a ten- or twelve-line dictionary resume.'"
Pretty scary to think that fandom is starting to follow that trend in real life. I hope the trend reverses eventually, and fandom overall migrates back to the LiveJournal/Dreamwidth style of stage.
—doctorlit
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Nice! by
on 2018-06-25 17:02:00 UTC
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That was a terrible fic, I'm impressed and horrified.
It seemed like the time-skips could have used a bit more scene-setting? It felt like we were back to banter really quickly after all of them. Not that time-skips are that strange, for an experienced pair of agents, but it felt like this fic was extra bad and yet it didn't affect the agents that much.
I loved the intro, and the threat of more trouble at the end with the tracker- I hope that comes back to bite her!
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Thoth's recruitment: A review. by
on 2018-06-25 16:11:00 UTC
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Thank you for the comments! Knowing what you're doing well is just as important as knowing what you're not doing well. I like to think that the 'connected but not' thing you're commenting on is deliberate - while (for instance) readers who already know Selene will get more out of seeing her in Driftwood, it's by no means essential, and I did that on purpose. But... some of it is also definitely just me throwing out more ideas than are good for me, with no real thought into how they fit together. The DIO tales are a big misfit for everything else, and a lot of the non-series stories are just me mucking about. ^_^ Plus there's Reorg and Crashing Down; I have no idea how well they hold up.
Right, down to business. In keeping with my new standing pledge, I took a look over Agent Thoth's wiki page. I think I actually read your cowrite with Nesh, so instead I've gone back to (no surprises here, I said it in the title!) that short 'Thoth is recruited into the Thousand Sons' story you've got linked.
I like the script style of the backstory, and the way you switch to a traditional third-person view for the HQ part. It really emphasises the difference between the two sections. (As it happens, I'm rereading Ravenor right now, which has a similar switch between first and third person when Gideon stops mucking about in people's heads.) It's a little thing, but it did catch my eye.
I was going to comment that Kannan seemed a little too Thoth-like, a bit too Astartes-aloof for where he's at in his life, with lines like 'There's no shame in your lack of belief'. But then I caught the line two down from that, and realised that it's entirely deliberate: he sounds like that because he's deliberately hiding his feelings. That sets up a wonderful contrast between the two characters' methods of dealing with their separation, and it definitely comes across in the dialogue.
hS
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Herasoron's Resolve is tested... by
on 2018-06-25 15:35:00 UTC
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"The walls close in, and every shadow hides conspiracy."
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Still on it by
on 2018-06-25 14:43:00 UTC
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I found some interludes and MSTs on RC88 and some OFUR chapters that had not been linked on the Wiki yet, so the pages for Foxglove, Laburnum, Stormsong and Skyfire have been updated once more.
HG
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Maybe, but... by
on 2018-06-25 14:39:00 UTC
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While the idea could potentially be played for laughs, I think most of us would take one of several other options:
1. The agents may stop the badfic before it gets to that point. The poor mini doesn't deserve that, after all.
2. There's a thing called a Simulation Generator that's perfectly suited to rescue an innocent mini from that situation while still collecting charges.
3. A name misspelled consistently may indicate a character replacement rather than a mini.
4. The writer may not consider the misspelling important enough compared to other aspects of the badfic to remark on at all.
That all goes for your "example," too. There isn't a mission to it yet, and it will be up to whoever tackles it (if anyone does) to decide how to handle it.
~Neshomeh
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An important thing to remember by
on 2018-06-25 13:33:00 UTC
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Catastrophe Theory takes place in three distinct times. Most of "The End Is Nigh" takes place in the future, around 2023-2025. Flashbacks take place in an alternate 2015. Oopart was pushed through a portal to a point before the timelines split.
So, while I do need characters in the future, I also need characters to do things during the initial invasion. Min Ra and Effie might have a role to play there. We'll have to wait and see.
-Phobos
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Chapter 7 review. by
on 2018-06-25 12:33:00 UTC
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"Guido Piano". XD
Did... did Sergio just get attacked by a flashback? Okay, this definitely feeds into the theme that the closer he gets to his previous life, the more that life will try to take him over. I like the fact that it's a subtle theme, rather than a big in-your-face thing.
And, hooray! Corolla in person! :D And an absolutely cliche scene which knows full well it's a cliche, and delights in it.
Favourite line: [Homura Akemi. Puella Magi Madoka Magica canon cha— Wait a minute, how did you get hold of me and why are you scanning yourself?] Snarky CADs come just after sensible Corolla on my list of favourites. :D
hS
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“The best-laid schemes o' mice an' men” by
on 2018-06-25 12:20:00 UTC
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In related news, the other day I was looking up the phrase “The best laid plans of mice and men/ Go often awry,” and while I knew it came from a poem, I did not know that the original was a Scots language poem: https://en.m.wikipedia.org/wiki/ToaMouse
This led to an interesting hour or two reading more about Scots as a language, which was pretty interesting!
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Hat...seems to be on. Let's do this! by
on 2018-06-25 12:00:00 UTC
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Alright. Settle in--being me, I write a lot to begin with, and I've also responded to HG's comments, so...that might have lengthened it. As usual, I've used formatting to try to make it easy to follow. If anything came out unclear, just ask.
Your characters:
Col. Bradbury: Nice to see an older human! For obvious reasons, a lot of agents tend to be young or young-looking when they start out, so, well, nice to see. I also just plain like the description of the colonel. Provided you avoid the potential pitfall of his ability to "procure just about anything just about anywhere" serving as deus ex machina, I can see him being pretty fun to read about. Actually, he's starting to feel a tiny bit Discworld-ish to me? In a great way. Unless someone can point out any problems (other than what HG said, which I'll address in a moment), I think he'll do just fine.
Regarding HG's comments: Yeah, I think his world would generally be labeled as just 'unpublished' or 'alternate World One' or something? I'm not completely sure. I know I have an agent planned from an alternate World One, also set in the future, which started from 'what if Yiddish was still a widely spoken language?' and developed from there. I never called it anything other than 'an alternate World One', though, to my memory.
My main question here is: what exactly makes Bradbury's home universe an alternate one? The only thing I'm seeing is that he's from the 2050s and they have medical and cybernetic science. If your main reasoning here is just that you want to be able to play with your own idea of a possible projection of the future (perfectly fine, sounds interesting)--it could really probably just be labeled 'alternate World One timeline' or something along those lines? I'd be happy for more details regarding Bradbury's home, though, to understand what makes it an AU. Apart from that, I bow to HG's knowledge here.
Gibbs: I...kind of like Gibbs as well. I think there's also a meme of something that looks a bit like him, so I have that automatic mental image, and it amuses me a bit. I'm personally unfamiliar with the conspiracy theories you seem to be referencing in his profile, but...sure, yeah. I'm amused. It should also be interesting to see how a human colonel and a draconian security guard from different universes interact. From the profile, Gibbs just...well, he also comes across as a bit of a character! The young, kind of a maverick sort. That could also make him a good foil for Bradbury. All in all, sounds good.
Regarding HG's comments: Yeah, typos need to be fixed. Also, if you haven't already, I suggest laying out at least the main conspiracy theories that are true or not true there. For one thing, Gibbs will probably have to explain it at some point (or be smacked in the face with 'what? Nah, that's just a conspiracy theory!'); for another, it'll help both you and us to get a sense of what's going on.
(Also, if Dulce base is still in there--I'm unclear on whether there's a problem with that or if it's just the misspelling on the Mesa--it should be 'Dulce Base', as it is in your response. Quick Google search confirms that capitalization. So that's another thing to fix.)
Characters overall: some details need fixing or tweaking, but...overall, both agents look good! Be a little careful of how you use Bradbury's talents.
Whew. On to the first prompt!
Alright. First things first: I really advise spacing for readability. I can get through this prompt and the other because they're short, but my days of making my way through longer stories like this if the writing's okayish and I like the plot are pretty much behind me. I'd advise hitting 'enter' an extra time at every new paragraph, or else take advantage of wider spacing and the tab key to indent the new paragraphs. (I don't know how you're planning on posting stories platform-wise, but one or the other of these methods should work on pretty much anything.)
With that out of the way: Um, I'm afraid you have another place name mistake. Matama, New Zealand is neither a real place (from what I can find) nor where FotR was filmed; Matamata, New Zealand, on the other hand, was indeed the town nearest the location of the Hobbiton set. That needs fixing. Between this and the Mesa (and the base capitalization)...you might want to start using Google to check your facts a little more, assuming that's an option for you. Or asking a beta to do it if it isn't. It's a good tool, and very easy to use for things like this.
Also, while Bradbury was a child at the right time to grow up with Lord of the Rings, he seems to have gained the trivia of the exact location of the set without the trivia that it was exterior only? Then again, I suppose he could reasonably assume that someone decided to build interiors in the past fifty-ish years...though I do have to wonder why he's thinking of the Hobbits as "well-dressed" when, unless fashions have seriously changed in his time, he should probably be thinking they're dressed in a really old style? That is, really old? It just...doesn't quite connect the more I think about it. I expect it's meant to be in contrast to what he expects to be normal pygmy dress, but...it still seems odd that his version of 'well-dressed' is Hobbiton and not something a bit more...modern.
As to the Hydramatic drive...okay. That does seem to be the capitalization. Fun fact--Hydra-Matic/Hydramatic Drive is also the name for what was apparently the first really successful automatic car transmission! The things you learn. The Pinkwater version does indeed look like something the PPC might want, though.
One more small thing before I actually get into the writing: I assume Nirvana's dressed like a Hobbit, since Bradbury addresses him as a local? (His Ye Olde Englishe is incorrect to my knowledge, by the way, though that may be on purpose? I love the wordplay in his second line, though--"faculties" and "faculty". Very fun.) And another thing, actually: Nirvana can speak parentheses? And Bradbury can hear them?
I'd add a bit of description somewhere at the end, probably, so that it doesn't go completely into dialogue for the last few exchanges of Bradbury's section and we continue to get a sense of movement. It would also give us a little more sense of, well, everything, including what Nirvana's thinking (I don't necessarily mean you should write out his thoughts, but even a moment of speculative looking or hesitation or something would make it flow a bit more). Things like that. Apart from this, it seems mostly fine and readable, and I like some of the dialogue. My only other problem is...actually, this is something HG pointed out as well. Is Bradbury from a Daniel Pinkwater bookverse? If he is, then that is his home continuum. If it's not, then well...okay, honestly, either way I'm a bit confused about what Bradbury's job is when we meet him. The terms are confusing (and don't seem to fit with him being a soldier); he's pretty formal in speech, which is...interesting, if also a bit confusing? Especially since it doesn't match his speech patterns in the second prompt at all? I just...I'm confused. This closer read-through is confusing me. Which is a real shame, because I still do like the character ideas and some of the writing (especially the opening of the second prompt).
Okay. Gibbs' part...well. I've read the explanation of the change in style; fine. It's a nice idea, but it is rather jarring here. This is also all one paragraph (except for Gibbs' two-word reaction at the end), which is...neither good nor necessary. It does feel a little like how Gibbs might write up a report, honestly, which I kind of like, but...that doesn't really make it work here, especially since it comes right after a different style. If this was its own piece and spaced out it would work better, though it's still...well, I wouldn't advise you to write a mission like this, though I would definitely read a mission where small chunks of it were actually excerpts from Gibbs' written mission report--that sounds like it could be done amusingly.
(Also: you want "Gibbs went to compliment the kid" rather than "complement.")
(Also also: I do like Gibbs as we see him here! He seems to mesh with his profile, which is nice, and he just plain seems like he'd be fun to read about.)
First prompt overall: This is...a bit messier than I remember thinking on the first, sleepy read-through. On the plus side, the SPaG looks fine and I'm not noticing any actually incorrect sentences. It could really use reworking, though. I'd like to see this succeed, but...I'm afraid the current version isn't there yet.
The second prompt:
Okay. As mentioned before, both in this post and in my first response, I really love this opening. So much. The entire first paragraph is just...I love it. Response Center 9-unreadable-smudge is fantastic, the military metaphor is both appropriate and executed nicely...There should probably be a new paragraph started at "On the edge of this cave of non-wonders," and again right before Bradbury speaks, but...listen, I love it. I really do. It's nicely done, it stands out, and it still makes me either smile or just sit up and go 'I like this!' on the third or fourth reading. I really like it.
The rest is, uh...okay, let's break it down.
-As mentioned in my response to the first prompt, Bradbury's speech patterns don't match at all between the two prompts. In the first, he says things like "I accept this," and, well, “I assure you, [...] I am in full possession of all my faculties, except the faculty of the department of engineering, who could probably help me. But I digress. Perhaps you, in the absence of the faculty, could furnish aid?” In the second, well, his first longer line is this: “Are we just gonna keep talking in circles like a couple of parrots, or are we gonna do something?” He does keep some of his nicer words, but...there's definitely a disconnect, and there just isn't enough writing (or anything in his profile) to know if he switches formality levels depending on the situation or if this is, in fact, a continuity error.
-After that beautiful opening, the entire prompt essentially becomes dialogue. There are six words mentioning who's talking (three for each), and one seven-word sentence for Gibbs leaving and the passage of time. That's it. Now, dialogue-only stories are a thing, but...the combination here is just...it's odd.
-Speaking of the dialogue, it would be really well supported by more description. I don't even mean description as nice as the opening bit: I just mean description of any sort. A bit of a sense of movement, maybe some other stuff that's in the RC, the expressions on their faces, their body language, thoughts, smiles, frowns, getting up--I'll take anything. It could be easily combined with giving a little more indication of who's talking, too--it gets hard to follow, especially since a, don't know them too well yet, and b, while they do sound different from each other, it isn't such a stark difference that it's immediately obvious (as in, say, a Victorian and a modern slang-using teenager in a conversation).
-Because it's almost completely dialogue, some of the jokes fall flat. Actually, I think most of them do. There's no timing, because we have no real clue what they're doing; their expressions can't add anything because they aren't described...
-We get some sense of how they interact just from the dialogue, it's true, but...so, so, so much more could be shown with a little description. I don't know if they trust each other or just tolerate each other; I don't know if they're wary, or curious, or...I just don't have enough, and I'd really like more. I like these characters! I want to really see them interact!
-I like the final joke, with the bottle of whiskey. Unfortunately, again, it falls flat. If we had a pause right before the line, a description, anything--look, here, I'll show you what I mean:
“I’m back!”
Bradbury looked up. He'd moved a good deal of the debris around, but had, to all appearances, failed to actually find the console. “Any luck?”
Gibbs nodded. “Yeah, they had a very good deal on baking stuff." He set something down on the wobbly table with a thunk, and smirked. "Also, I got a bottle of whiskey, ‘cause this seems like it’s gonna take a while.”
It's obviously my writing style, and my interpretation of both how I'd frame that joke and how I'm very quickly interpreting possible ways for your characters to interact...but do you see a difference? The reader (hopefully) gets a better sense of what's going on, of what Gibbs is like, of time passing, and a bit of both the RC interior and how the two agents might interact. It's a lot more information, added with four descriptive or mildly descriptive sentences.
Second prompt overall: SPaG and sentences are perfectly fine yet again. The opening is beautiful. Would heavily advise adding a lot more description to the dialogue to fill out the scene, make the jokes shine, and give a much better sense of the RC, the characters, and the new partnership. Also: Bradbury unfortunately seems a bit less strongly developed than Gibbs in writing, possibly because of the inconsistent speech patterns--it feels like you have less of a grasp on how to write him right now. It would be good to either work with him a little more or just resolve the continuity issues, depending on whether this impression is correct or it's accidental.
The badfic: It's...wellll. Definitely pretty OOC (in a way that reminds me vaguely of Partially Kissed Hero at the bits with Sirius, though far milder and, well, a lot of things remind me of PKH these days). Skimming along, Harry is apparently...well, he just called Arwen his aunt, and Aragorn thought he was James for a minute? And earlier he said he talked to Hades? Yeah, uh, I think you could get a good mission out of this. There's definitely plenty to comment on.
Alright. With all that said...I'm afraid that, for now, it's Permission Denied. Fix the small errors in both the writing pieces and the profiles; spend a little time with Bradbury (or with making him come across consistently, depending); rework both your pieces (and run them by betas--it's good to see you had a beta this first time, by the way, forgot to mention); and submit them again. You truly have some great ideas here, and are obviously capable of writing that shines**; if you can expand and polish what's here, I think it has the potential to be amazing.
~Z
**See the second prompt's opening and, to a slightly lesser extent, Bradbury's first non-Ye Olde Englishe line.
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Oh dear, my dear. You are so tragically misinformed. by
on 2018-06-25 10:40:00 UTC
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'First of all', to quote you, Leto deserved everything she got; or do you think attempting to steal my husband and my throne was just a light-hearted jape? Secondly, she only gave birth at all due to finding loopholes in my decrees; the 'nine months' thing was a fluke that should never have happened.
Thirdly, the fact that a trio of deities (Zeus, Neshthena, and Hephaestus) who never knew their mothers simply assumed that nine months was a good length for a pregnancy is hardly my fault; had my husband only asked before ordaining the creation of Pandora (and if you want to talk about mistreatment of women, look at that!), I could have set him straight. But he didn't.
I'm not even going to address your scurrilous accusations regarding Hephaestus. But as for little Alcides - who does not deserve to use my name, thank you very much - he was a brat from birth (why do you think I tried to stop it?). He attempted to maul me as an infant, but did I retaliate? No! I let Athene take him away in peace, because of my overwhelming kindness.
To find that Alcmene promptly renamed him after me to celebrate her petty victory, and then immediately accused me of trying to murder him with snakes (snakes! Why would I send snakes?) was the biggest slap in the face you can imagine.
As for blaming his wretched violence on me, I'm sorry, but do you not even remember the way he slaughtered your nephew Linus? The boy was clearly wrong in the head, and he only proved that when he murdered poor Megara. Nor did the Labours have anything to do with me; he was set to them by the Oracle at... Delphi... wait a minute.
Serpents are the followers of Hermes, son of Zeus and that fallen star Maia. Madness is the blessing of Dionysus, son of Zeus and Semele. Delphi is the domain of Apollo, son of Zeus and Leto.
... my Me. The whole wretched 'Heracles' affair was a plot by my husband's sons to discredit me. I bet Neshthena was in on it too! They're out to get me, the lot of them!
No... no. Calm down, Herasoron. Everything is fine. Your husband loves you. Your handmaids love you. You are beautiful and powerful.
Right.
Your attempts to break me have failed, Twisthalia, daughter of Zeus. Go back to your little comedies.
((o.O Well, that took a few turns I wasn't expecting. ~hS))
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As a troper... by
on 2018-06-25 08:22:00 UTC
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The Notary makes a perfect Asshole Victim. Of course, Phobos could always go for an Alas, Poor Scrappy moment.
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About my agents... by
on 2018-06-25 08:20:00 UTC
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I'm actually pretty sure that they would both have died by the point the story takes place in. Min Ra would have probably been killed after leaping in to protect someone else from a Sue (whether or not this was a Leeroy Jenkins move or a last stand and whether or not the person she was protecting died anyway is up to interpretation), and Effie would have been shot down on a mission (death's a hazard for the military).
But hey, if you want to keep one or both of them alive or explore their deaths in flashback, I'm game for it.
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"Prompts goin' cheap! Get your fresh Prompts 'ere" by
on 2018-06-25 08:14:00 UTC
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*ahem*
It's been two weeks (although it feels like longer for some reason), so that means two more prompts to get your teeth (or any other body part I guess) into. Take a look at these juicy prompts and see what you can come up with (thanks to Ix and Thoth for unknowingly providing me with the ideas for the prompts this week).
Prompt 1: One of your characters disappears
Prompt 2: One of your characters is teasing another about something.
Novastorme
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New mission! by
on 2018-06-25 07:27:00 UTC
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The Aviator and Zeb tackle a daughter of Sirius Black and the goddess Artemis, and Zeb teases his partner about her love life.
Harry Potter x Percy Jackson and the Olympians.
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Read this, before it vanishes! by
on 2018-06-25 04:47:00 UTC
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I've found out. I don't know how long this will last. NA may be on our side for now, but they won't be forever.
It's all a setup. The agents, the missions... it's part of something bigger. I think we're a front for Sue writers. Or possibly reptiles, or some kind of religious group? Possibly gay Catholic lizard frogmen who write Mary Sues. I haven't ruled it out yet.
What I do know is that the organization was founded in a far off year (like, '66? I dunno), its founding documents solemnly inscribed in an inscrutable tongue upon parchment paper, a language known only to those devoted to the cause. Probably elvish or something. Their goals remain obscured to this day. And that's just the tip of the ice. I don't know where they put the rest of the ice, but I'm pretty sure the ice is the key to this whole oredeal. So... look out for giant freezers. It's connected. Totally.
But this group has been... manipulating things. Fandoms. Writers. It made a bunch of people think Sinbad played a genie. I dunno why. But it's all CONNECTED. Somehow! It's got to be! It even was responsible for [Redacted, there is no conspiracy. The Canon Cabal does not exist. ~NA].
Discuss.
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No, I haven't snapped. But I think that we've gotten too serious around here of late. So insane delusional, comedic conspiracy nonsense ho! Please join the fun.