Subject: Interesting!
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Posted on: 2020-02-24 18:50:36 UTC

I agree with Nesh - Vania's phasing is intriguing, and could make for some great character interactions. The original, in contrast, gives off an air of 'she got timewarped forward 3 years in a cupboard', which is absolutely not what the new version gives.

That said, her jump to 'I'm going to kill you!' makes her seem rather more edgy than I think you're going for. It has overtones of 'my agent is an UNHINGED PSYCHOPATH who will MURDER YOU for looking at her and EATS BLOOD'. (Selene, get out of my face, I'm writing here.) Like everything else, that can be written well - but it's also a classic Gary-Stu marker for a reason. She gives off completely different vibes to Vania from the original, or to my vague memories of the character.

Of course, you've been around long enough that I know you could carry it off, if that's what you were aiming for, so I'm not concerned. But it is strikingly different.

As you say yourself, Doc is mostly reacting here, so there's not a lot to say; he reads like Doc. Which is good. :)

hS

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