Subject: Lily does not own a car, no.
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Posted on: 2023-05-08 00:23:54 UTC
But I do plan to get Draco into a car at some point.... not sure if it'll be on the page, but it will happen!
Subject: Lily does not own a car, no.
Author:
Posted on: 2023-05-08 00:23:54 UTC
But I do plan to get Draco into a car at some point.... not sure if it'll be on the page, but it will happen!
Since it fell off the front page, etc.
Chapter Seven: Harry battles Dementors, Agent Professor Liu battles discusses his backstory.
The Trio prepare for exams and Buckbeak's appeal.
Warning for a terrorist attack and usage of blood in blood magic.
I did appreciate how you've played Harmione's abuse of the Time-Turner more realistically - with the fatigue kicking in and causing her to have underwhelming results. And the IronChocolate Curtain between Draco and Harry was fun.
Yeah, that bit's based off the semester in uni where I took 5 classes instead of the recommended 4 because i wanted to do both playwriting and screenwriting, and ended up so burned out that I could only submit mediocre final projects :P
Nothing like some chocolate truffles for a good detente!
But it was worth it. Fine work weaving the important plot points of the original with the new world as usual, Lily! I loved the Ghostbusters reference in one of the ltest chapters (sorry, can't remember if it was on this one or the previous - I read them together)
I think the Ghostbusters ref was in the previous chapter. But thank you all the same, I'm glad you liked that!
. . . but Much Ado is on my PPC reading list, at least! And hopefully I can get to Twelfth Night eventually, too!
—doctorlit might read things online more frequently than actual books nowadays . . .
Well. I have learned things tonight. Painful things.
—doctorlit has learned things
I loved the little detail about healers' manuals being actually anatomically inaccurate. That fits oh so well with this particular version of the Potterverse... and I suspect there would be quite a bit of mistakes in canon, as well, though I hope less glaring. I'm not sure I even want to know what a "wandering womb" is supposed to be...
As usual, excellent worldbuilding and flaweless execution of how the characters would act in this universe! If feels paining to see Neville act like this, but I can't help but feel this is how it would go down indeed.
...a very ancient belief that all the ~weird womanly stuff~ happened because of displaced uteri wandering around the body. It started with the Ancient Greeks and persisted in European Medicine for a while, even being recorded in a book called The Suffering of the Mother in 1603. It's before the Statute, so wizard Healers would've ascribed to this, and, well, it's not that far-fetched to them that some mage's womb might wander around their body, so they never really stopped believing in it.
Thank you! Poor Neville, honestly...
Draco spends Christmas at Godric's Hollow.
Warning: blood magic, muggle-baiting, and Draco's continuing adventures with PTSD.
I really like the way you've remixed canon so that the fic hits the main plotbeats but with new causes and outcomes. Things feel familiar in a way that lets the main point (that is to say the new and improved worldbuilding) to shine. You're also doing a good job with explaining the AU. I mostly know the fic genre you're referencing by reputation but I'm able to keep up with things without issue.
This chapter started very nice and fluffy which was a nice way to get our guards down before the second half hit. I hope Rose and Gary will be okay, I like them a lot and want to see more of them. I'm also very curious about the poisoning, that was unexpected considering how well things were going before then.
Yes, the point of the rewrite is to hit major beats of the story, but within the context of the new setting! It doesn't make sense for things to replicate exactly as they do in the books, given that the entire world is different. I'm glad the worldbuilding and exposition has been working for you so far.
Gary and Rose will be showing up more in 4th year, too! And you'll see more on the poisoner in subsequent chapters. Thank you for reading!
Started nice and fun, then it kicked into high gear. The plot thickened, and even more nastyness happened.
However, Draco seems to have made a decision! (Or, at least, he's further down the good path) And it is simply beautiful that it was sparked by him witnessing Pureblood abuse of Muggles in first person, which for the Circle of Gits is pretty much warranted. Well played, Lily!
All in all, an excellent chapter!
He's never had a front-row seat to seeing direct consequences of Pureblood supremacy in the books (since I would argue that all the Malfoy Manor takeover stuff is internal politics, not them actually suffering direct consequences of Pureblood supremacy), so giving him this chance to connect with Muggles his age and then watching them get hurt by someone who believes the same stuff as his parents... really makes a boy think... especially when he knows that being a bigot will cost him his new friendships with the trio!
Thanks for reading!
And also show Mr. Gaunt why they stuck-up Purebloods still live in hiding from Muggles. Avada Kedavra? Please, we have "metal wands" that spew them at hundreds per minute.
That aside, there's no way the Christmas festivities at Godric Hollow's aren't going to end up in disaster.
Also, nice way to drop in the Knight Bus! With, of course, Draco being disgusted by it. I'm afraid his first impact with a Muggle vehicle won't make him like cars much, will he?
And she's only just getting started!
Don't worry, I do have plans for Gaunt to have some encounters with Muggles in the future. It will be fun for me and you, but not for him.
Godric's Hollow is going to be entertaining, yes! ;P But maybe not quite in the way you suspect!
To be fair the Knight Bus is an appropriation of Muggle culture ;P It's not how real buses work, Draco!
On the contrary, compared to the Knight Bus, a Muggle car will feel very calm and safe! Perhaps that was Lily's plan all along? Then again, I don't think she owns a car . . .
—doctorlit, jealous of free public wizarding transport
But I do plan to get Draco into a car at some point.... not sure if it'll be on the page, but it will happen!
Harry and Aunt Sev go to lunch with Mum and Uncle Regulus.
BL1 warning! Only references and implications, but still.
I find kinda hard to believe that a version of Pettygrew would have the metaphorical balls to do that, but the rest of the chapter does kind of work well. I'm curious to see how you'll play out what you've set up with this chapter!
I imagine this world's Voldemort is very persuasive, considering his direct access to his followers' magic ;P
But yes, you'll see how it plays out...
I'm letting my knowledge of his crimes, both canon and Avalonverse, color my view of him, and how the other characters view him. He's just such a yucky fella! But I suppose it would be hard for me to suddenly 180-degree on one of my friends, so yeah. Point taken.
—doctorlit, pointed
And I'm now amused by the mental image of Sirius Black breaking pickaxe after pickaxe in Minecraft trying to mine bedrock.
Excellent work as usual in weaving some of the unchangeable plot points of canon into a completely different plotline - Harry's problem with not getting a Firebolt isn't about how or cost, he's Lord Potter after all. The problem is the fact his mother isn't keen in getting a 13-years-old the broom equivalent of a supersports bike.. which I really understand, as o-150 mph in ten seconds is pretty much Suzuki Hayabusa territory.
...because he's out here undermining the status quo! Or something.
Just watched a video of someone doing 0-160mph on a Hayabusa and wow, my driving anxiety just kicked back into gear. Yeah, there's no way Lily's willingly buying Harry something like that. Luckily for Harry, Sirius is the ~fun~ godparent!
Thanks for reading!
From what I read, stock Hayabusas do the quarter mile in just under 10 seconds (9.9 or so) reaching exactly 150 MPH. That's insane, and I'm starting to suspect the Firebolt is pretty much the Wizarding World equivalent of that.
Except that instead of on a bike, which is scary enough, you're on a glorified wooden stick. Jeez.